I think the fic was written as beautiful as your fics aalways are. :)

-Her constant extreme racist behavior threatens to destroy the enjoyment of reading your fics.-

I disagree, that IS Demona thats HER personality think about it, she acts the same way in the shows. Mabye she'll lighten up, but for now she still has her righst to be angery/in denial.

Oh boy...

THAT was REALLY sick!

And by the way, I hope you let Demona leave town soon, because her constant over the edge cold attitude written by you becomes slowly too much to read, and it becomes slowly a caricature of itself, if you not give her some (better more) away time.

Her constant extreme racist behavior threatens to destroy the enjoyment of reading your fics.

So Hudson lost one of his legs? I hope they give him some sort of prothesis. At least you could tell, what excatly had infected him, and spread so fast.

When comes more?

It was a bit short, but is really interesting.

Chapter 1:

I really hope you not plan to let Brooklyn remain a bachelor for the rest of his life! He deserves a good girl at his side.

Chapter 2:

Well, Elisa got into hot water. Just let's hope it won't really have any lasting effects.

Chapter 3:

What the heck is that thing in Hudson's leg? Some aftereffect of the sword? Regardless what it is, it sounds really dangerous.

Chapter 4:

What is in that package? I bet this is for the next story, right? Regardless what is in it, it must be really shocking. Oh, and I hope Demona takes this beast Shade with her, when she leaves. This beast simply irritates me.

I hope to see the next story soon!