Good story.

Pretty good description, you could extend it a little but this is fine, also the paragraph are just a bit chunky for me to read thats all.

thats all the bad comments I have but the rest, gripping and I want to read more.

update soon

Wolf

Wai! You're finally on! ^_^

Update!

Sayonara,
Hotaru 'Chi' Sasaki

Wow. A great start! Packed a lot of action into a short chapter, there. I loved your descriptions, although it ended up telling me what happened in the fight with Doku (well, I knew, but never actually WATCHED Doku hit Ryu, that was too "Yeowch" for me to handle) but... the whole vengeance thing... great work, I want to see Ryu avenge everything now! Nice chapter!