 sonryz 2008-05-01 . chapter 1...Oh god that's funny. XD Sorry if it wasn't meant to be, but... Yeah, I like that, cheers. XDD
~*sonryz |
 Blahsblah2001 2005-12-16 . chapter 1Woo! Go Goku!
That sounds like a one- santance story. Like, you know the one sentace about the candle, and write the whole story around it.
_melissa |
 silver fox 5224 2005-04-04 . chapter 1Cool!! are you gonna update or wat?? do update coz i wanna know wat will happen next |
 ani 2005-04-03 . chapter 1cute, really cute! |
 Dark Romanticism 2005-03-04 . chapter 1oh my freaking god! That candle joke is the best!! |
 Madame Maya 2005-02-13 . chapter 1Hehe, cute. This is my favorite pairing. |
 Me-Nuriko 2004-12-17 . chapter 1Nice and naughty, heheh. Best Birthday wish ever for Sanzo. ^_~ |
 kitsune-oni (don't want to log in) 2004-11-30 . chapter 1 Hey there! Loved this fic... It's so cute!! *g* What would I do if you didn't write yaoi... You know what they say: When you're good, you're good, when you're bad, you're better. ^^
Anyway, a couple parts of the scribble read a little strangely to me, so here they are. Sorry for being picky.
"the earth spirit seemed that he was" --> that sounds a little funny. I would've put "seemed to be trying"
"monkey because curious" --> shouldn't it be 'became'?
"one box he promised" --> the first part of the sentence is 'it had been' so shouldn't this be 'one box he had promised'?
"It would be Sanzo’s favorite" --> 'it would have been'
"he empathized" --> emphasized
Sorry for being so picky... I'm in my English teacher mode today. Anyway, I loved this fic, especially this part:
He paused. “You know I’m not superstitious.”
“Then make a wish you know will come true.”
*gives Sanzo-shaped biscuits* And update SIB asap, by the way. |
 rasinah 2004-11-30 . chapter 1Yai, Iapetus-chan... you *know* I don't read 39/93 but yet here I am... Black magic, perhaps? *giggles*
Kidding! I was curious so took a peek at this. Well, what to say? Nice and cute, heartwarming too, though Goku making the first move doesn't quite sit well with me. ^^;
A question though. Did Hakkai teach Goku how to bake that cupcake? Hehe... |
 Chevaux 2004-11-29 . chapter 1Becky Armstrong! I thought this was going to be all nice and innocent, but no...Sanzo just had to have someone blow his candle for him. I guess he doesn't know that you can put out your candle yourself using your hand.
Gr...you know I'm just jealous that my birthday didn't go accordingly. ^_^ |
 elven dreamer 2004-11-29 . chapter 1Sweet and utterly goregous. Doesn't need to be an R, though. Definetly not. |
 keistje 2004-11-28 . chapter 1*grin*
You're awesome. And so very, very naughty!
^_^ |