Nice story.

That was way to short!

CYAS!

ur an aussie? kewl so am I

Im from Perth u?

CYAS!

rape kit

Great story. Very sad but needed ending.

A quick google of mary sue should tell you that a mary sue is the james-bond heroine of literature. Someone who is irresistably beautiful with random preternatural skills, or otherwise unbelievable attributes - in this case, a child living by themselves from seven then randomly running to a police station. It's not a bad story but spelling mistakes are really stupid. "bear" it not "bare" it, pigsty not pig stye. etc

I don't think it should be either rape test or rape kit; I could be wrong but I'm pretty sure all girls who faint aren't randomly tested for rape and it'd be an invasion of privacy for them to test without her knowledge/consent or extenuating circumstances i.e. she said she was raped and then collapsed, etc.

I don't really know what I thought of this one. It felt kind of rushed. The storyline jumped around and missed out huge chunks. Great ideas though, it has the potential to be a great story.

awe that was so sad. it actually made me cry a little. short but sweet. good job!

I liked it a lot! A Mary Sue is a fictional character that seems too perfect, like they have no flaws at all. If it's a guy fictional character, it's a Gary Sue. But Nicole wasn't a Mary Sue! Yeesh. Anyway, the ending was sad :(

write more then one chapter please.

i love it keep it up.

it is good keep it up.

i love your story.

i like the story