O just want to say that this is an amazing story.
The scenes are great and suspencefull i love this so much i give it a five out of five

Kickass man, I was totally floored by the entire story's look and feel. There is honetly enough material here for you to get this thing published...maybe add on a few more chapters and have it professionally proof-read, then ship it off...cause this story really gets my inner Halo fan jumping for joy. I can't wait for the next chapter man, and I hope that you haven't forgotten about it...almost a year and a half since it was last updated...

Great job man, really enjoyed the story,

Ignorant One

I LOVE THIS!! THIS IS THE SINGLE BEST FAN FIC I HAVE EVER READ!! Sure your spelling might be off on one or two words but the story more than makes up for it. Imagine if Halo was written by Tom Clancy and you get the idea.
The one thing i have noticed that would need to be changed is the constant repetition of words in a sentance, if you have mentioned something twice, assume we already know what you're talking about.
Otherwise, a masterpiece!

An excellently thought out story with very few hitches or unplausible (As in the Halo universe.)happenings.

man this chapter deserves a great review:

-INSERT GREAT REVIEW HERE-

the end.

but you cant hide

dang man these fights are really nicely played out. the first attack on the beach and then the attack on the armor was awesome.

slgithly OoC but not overtly so

i likes

good cobat descriptions.

As to how they did it, Johnson had no clue, but he didn’t care. It wasn’t his job to worry about things like that.

man one would really want a shotty right now

meh, it seemed too convenient for the elites to be able to use t probe as well, but its ur story not mine. all in all, im really liking the story.

NO!

ARBITER!


lol nice cliff

hehe cool. wanna see how this fares out.

“Good. Now, be a gentleman and give me that extra Trident suit, will you?” LOL nice.

nice, very nice. wondering why you have such few reviews.