Wow, that was surprisingly...really good. (Or maybe it's just me, cuz I'm into fluff...unless it's, like, incredibly sappy. Then that's just...no.)

The descriptions of all Clara's friends were really nice and all, but I thought it was a bit unnecessary. It was a bit much to take in all at once, especially since this is only a one-shot. But it helped make her life seem more realistic, and it seems like you spent a lot of time thinking about each character and mapping out their personality and history, which is good for backstory.
Also, the other newsboys (not newsboys in this story, but you know what i mean) didn't seem to have very pivotal roles. like, i got the feeling they were just there for decoration. (puah, decoration--get it? no? yeah, okay.)

Other than that, i liked it a lot. The relationship/break-up thing between Jack and Clara was well thought out and it didn't clash with Jack's personality in canon. The Clara-moping-over-Jack bits tossed in here and there also gave it a nice depressing-Christmassy feel.

And, I don't know if you'd actually take this suggestion seriously, but I really think you could add to this, maybe slap on a couple more chapters and throw in a few more cutesy-fluff pairings. (Ahem...um, are you opposed to slash? Just a thought!)
But if you think that sounds utterly ridiculous, then don't mind me!

good stuff, keep it coming!

awh that's really sweet.

compaired to the song fic i say this was 5 bazillion times better.

~Rubix

YAY FOR FLUFF AND DIE EVIL UNCOMFORTABLE JEANS! wh00t!

did you know we're all genetically related to bananas?

good story

love random

Wow, that story was awesome! I loved my character. You did a wonderful job!

Yay!! You updated sooner than expected!! that's awesome! thank you for using Bronwyn...she's a favorite character of mine, probably because her personality is similar to mine...

one question though...are you going to have multiple one shots? or is this the only story using the CCs? Let me know sometime!

I liked it though, alot...it was a really cute fluffy story, even though Jack isn't my favorite newsie, BLINKY BOO is! mwha! nah, just mesiing, but Blink is the best!

Update again soon...thanks much for using Bronwyn!
Love ya,
Shooter

"Anyone up for Jenga?"

I.LOVE.DAVIE!! Aww ... sniff sniff! HAHA! And the "sweater vests and correcting peoples grammar" line was a pure stroke of genius! I think Clara should have ended up with David to be perfectly hoinest. Why was Trixie making out with him?! GAH! And the image of Jack with stubble is very funny. YAY. Short story, and it should have been longer, but everything David said or Racetrack said was totally worth it. "Abreast has nothing to do with boobs!" "You said boobs!" Love it!

-StormShadow21

Cute, cute, cute, INSANELY CUTE!! I loved it! Dude, you had me down PERFECTLY! Like, no joke. This was so fluffy and wonderfully written. Just in time for Christmas :D Again, I praise you with 5 gold stars. Update soon on New York Is Calling Me! LoL.

~*Hollywood*~

That was great! You got my character down pat! I really enjoyed the story. I'm glad that Jack and you made up. Keep up the great work, and Happy Holidays!

“I just don’t understand how he knows that the mice aren’t moving. And what’s up with the cap? What’s it’s purpose? Is it protecting his hair or is it just an accessory?” he asked, quite puzzled.

-OMG! I can't breathe...

“Merry Kwanzaa everyone!” Blink slurred, flopping onto a surprised Race’s lap.

MAWHAH

I wondered if alcohol was the only substance he’d been abusing this evening.

(snort) heheh.

I SEE ME!

(pause) (rereads) OMG YOU PUT MY BOYFRIEND IS CHRISTIAN?! OMG YOU ARE A.W.E.S.O.M.E!! Like... JK Rowling awesome. Oh, and I thoroughly enjoyed my description! Disney and HP forever!!

Damn him and his insane metabolism.
HAH!

“Trix, I can NOT hit on David. I mean, he’s...he’s DAVID! With the sweater vests and the grammar correction? Dear God, no!”

AWW! Thats what we love about him! haha.

that was awesome! it t'was! heh i said t'was... like t'was the night before christmas...

ANYWAY... GREAT STORY! It was hilarious!! I loved it, and I will get to work on a you.jack!

-Kathleen