Seems like you have made a pretty good start here. I'd like to see where you go with this story.
I am well aware how real life can wreck havoc with one's fic writing time... but hope you update it again soon.

i don't usually reply but i did want to say that yes she has blue eyes, and the reason why will be delivered soon. :) can't give away all her secrets at the beginning of the story. then you wouldn't come back for more.

You said Seraphina is Asian, but in the first chapter you mentioned her having blue eyes. Could she not have been a Russian girl, who's father came from Siberia and didn't want her?
You did an excellent job of showing how evil the Master was. And I hope Jarod rescues her before it is too late.

I loved watching The Pretender when it was on TV, but it stopped being shown like 3 years ago. Thankfully this fanfic hits the spot, I like the story line, the writing style and want to read more, so author please update soon!

Well, you've got my attention. I'm interested to see how Serafina's training (not to mention her mere existance) is connected to, or will interact with, the characters we all know. Intriguing, to say the least.

good story progression and continuity. Interesting plot I look forward to further chapters. You have a good grasp of the principle in writing "Grab your readers interest and keep it." You have done this remarkably well in this chapter.

Interesting beginning. Please continue.

interesting story so far. though i'm not sure a five-year-old could take such abuse with out passing out or something from the pain.

Interesting story. Keep going

Okay, you've got me intrigued.
Looking forward to seeing where you are going with this.

love it...more asap