nice timing snape!

awesome!! please update asap!

please update asap!! i've been hooked on this story since chapter 1!! also, please try to work on your grammar.

Example: "there" vs "their". the former is used when talking about a place. the latter is used when one is showing possession of something by more than one person. (I hope that made sense.) Also, try using spell check on MS Word. otherwise, amazing story, and please update asap!

who is it? who is the bat-person? please update asap!

don't you own Carmilla Hannigan? If you don't, then what other story line is she from?

amazing! i love the idea of a half-vampire-half-witch! its so cool!!

oh very nice good job

i like it it's quick you aren't dragging it all out good job

aw, cute

ya harry he's such a sweetie, lol

m red eyes, my god that's hot she should get with dilly, their child would rule the world...oh my got inspiration, dilly get a vamp chick next time! thank a bunch my readers will be most pleased! and great job. longer chapters would be nicer but you can tell me to shove it up my ** because I am the LAST person to complaine about short chapters. lol

very good i liked the introduction and it was quick and gave us the situation, setting, and hints about the history rather then dragging out like theres some great terrible secret that turns out to be nothing really interesting. good job

This is good story. Great plot! I can't wait to see what happens when her father comes into play. Or what Draco's reaction will be when she tells why she doesn't like purebloods. Please keep writing this story.

this is really good. Keep writing.

Before posting more of your story, it would be best if you proofread your work more and used the assistance of a beta-reader to further polish the rough spots.

Pick one tense (past, present, etc) and stick with it. It's confusing, not to mention incorrect, to shift tenses like you have done.

Spelling is important, as is choosing the correct word to use. While 'names' is a correctly spelled word, it is not the right word. A person is not 'names', but 'named'.

Using a spell-check program is always a good idea, but proofreading your own work will catch little things like the 'names'/'named' error. And if you do not have a spell check program, one is available on-line at

Punctuation is also important. Improper usage, or lack of usage, renders a story confusing and unreadable.

Here are your first two sentences as written:
"A beautiful witch names Alexia, roamed the earth she traveled far and wide fighting off the dark forces. She spent much time in Romania, while in Romania she got more than she ever would have expected..."

Instead, try:
"A beautiful witch named Alexia roamed the Earth. She traveled far and wide, fighting off dark forces of evil. Much of her time was spent in Romania, where she encountered more than she ever would have expected...

This example is not perfect, but it shows how you can improve the flow by using punctuation (and a few word changes).

When indicating speech, punctuation must still be used.

" "Geez mum you act like the train has started moving" Carmilla said. " – A comma is required after 'moving' and before the closing quotation mark.

" "I just don't want you to be late" "- In this case, a period is required after 'late' and before the closing quotation mark.

".. how to handle myself." Carmilla said reassuringly. " - Here, the period after 'myself' should instead be a comma.

There are many on-line tutorials to assist with punctuation, or your local library will have books available.

No one expects perfection, however a writer should always do their best to ensure the work posted is as free from errors as possible.

Multiple errors can cause a number of potential readers to abandon your story and no writer desires that. Readers will also, fairly or not, form an opinion about a writer based on what has been written and how. If a story has many errors, come readers may assume the writer does not care about their work and label said writer as ignorant and uneducated. No writer truly wants that.

If you cannot, or will not, take the time to edit your work then do not post anything further. Harry Potter is overrun with poorly written, slap-dash stories – don't add to it. Instead, stand out from the crowd by posting something well written and coherent. Readers will thank you for it.