good one

I loved this, and it was so sad, and it was so good, and you write so beautifully which is quite a suprise on this site. I'll now shut up and go favorite this.

**! This is wierd...I had been thinking for some time about making a oneshot similar to yours. I actually have half of it worked out before reading this...same idea actually, albeit the whole Christmas idea and stuff but still there is the union of Harry and Pansy for the good of The Light. Damn.I need to think this over, I think...

ONe word:
WOW!
that was amazing. i love the way you write, your discriptions are amazing and that was a great idea you came up with too.

Very touching. And very, very moving. I wish Pansy had married Draco though. *sniff* Poor Draco.

loverly! really liked it. =) although there were a few grammatical errors, it was so frickin' good. x] urgh. i love it how you kept the audience in contemplation of who the narrarator was... i was kinda surprised it was Pansy actually. ... or maybe i'm just stupid. anyway, it was really good and write more. i'm just gonna go back and read it again...

YOU KILLED DRACO! NO! *cries* I likes it though! ^_^

That was amazing. I love the way you write. I'm kinda confused on why Pansy had to kill Draco. But that's okay! lol. Keep up the great work!
~Syaoronsangel

Not to be trite, but that was deep. I was moved. Pansy was believable and the contrast between her thoughts and everyone's perceptions, I found that to be very well done. "Lust and love no longer meant the same thing to me and on our wedding night, the salt of his sweat sluicing down my skin meant nothing" That was my favorite description, the words, they hurt. I really enjoyed this fic! Great job!

Excellent! I really enjoyed this story, and I am blown away by your writing style. Amazingly angsty.

I like it, never would've expected that from Pansy OR Harry =PP

Wow. What a good idea for a story. Props to you.
The title is perfect! It was really great.
Maggie

Ooh..this was really good! Please hurry and update this. I have to know what happens. :D

Emma

it's bad, real bad. my little sister could do btter than that - and she is five...

The imagry is fantastic and the concept is excellent. Unfortunately, there are a few problems.

First, a minor quibble. I'm having problems swallowing is that Pansy married Harry that night, and in that room. Instead of saying "I got married that night...", I would have something along the lines of "That night the die was cast, and I was to marry Harry the next day, in that same room filled with..."

The lack of a backstory of how Pansy was convinced of her decisions prevents my understanding of the marriage. I can see her making a decision about Draco being harmful to the world's "ideas of justice", but why Pansy? If she really loved him, why kill him? Why not find a way to lock him up, or something similar?

The other part is why would she marry Harry Potter? If the "problem" to save the world is resolved by killing Draco, why would/should she marry Harry?

The paragraph "Harry catches me..." starts off nicely, but suffers from an identity issue. I think you should have ended it with "war torn world." By the time Pansy wrote this, she had gone through several years of change and growth. For example, you wrote the part about the "hardly tell ne heartbeat from the other", and that indicates that Pansy and Harry have become close and that they share a bond. For those reasons, I think the part about the Slytherins losing and Gryffindors winning really should be eliminated. The whole point of the marriage is a union, and that they were no longer Slytherin and Gryffindor -- only a man and woman that did what they had to do so that future generations are safe.

I don't think I would have said anything if you phrased it as, "who cares if a life and love was lost" and left tho house politics out. It seems to me you kind of lost focus.

It probably sounds like I don't like what I read. Quite the opposite. I love what I read. If I didn't like your story, I would not have written this long of a review.

I think with practice and coaching you will develop into a very good writer. As it is now, your style is very romantic and invokes emotions very well. You do need to concentrate a little more on the logic of the story so you don't introduce conflicing imagry and leaps of logic.

I think (and hope) you can probably write more of this. Perhaps you could have Pansy explain how she and Harry developed their life together. What type of challenges did they face? How do they support each other? Did they fight a lot in the early days of their marriage?

Great job, and keep on writing!