 Erich 12/5/04 . chapter 1 Nice to see this is finally up. I think the suspense had been building for some time.
Is Carl really Ororo's brother-in-law's name, or is that your idea.
I think I can agree with Evan saying he felt he never really fit in with the X-Men. But I wonder what was the real source of it - teenage rebellion, stubborn attitude, or something else.
Lockheed acting like a cat with a ball of yarn? Okay, I can accept some outlandish things in your fanfics because of the genre involved. But that's just a little too much of a stretch to accept.
Nice family meeting, and good banter between the sisters.
Maybe you should consider having Blink meet her parents again during a random encounter. Give her a chance to make a final closure, should she need to.
Still toying with a LoRo, huh? Maybe you should consider it more fully only after Xavier, Logan, and Ororo learn about Scott/Jean and Vince/Rogue. Though Ororo has a valid point in not pursuing anything with Logan at this time. He has his hands, or should I say claws, full with his daughter.
Those glimpses into Ororo's and Vi's pasts - did you get them from the comics, or are they your ideas.
Seems like Blink's parents were the black sheeps of their respective families.
After hearing about Ororo skinny dipping, I wonder if Blink might try something like that. Nah. Not Blink. Tabby and Pam, however... And maybe Jean, Rogue, Kitty, and Amanda. I included the latter two because of how serious they are with their respective boyfriends.
I knew it. I knew that was the good news.
Well, considering everything, I think everyone at the Institute would understand Carl's and Vi's concerns and their wish that the baby doesn't have an active X-gene.
Now Ororo and Logan are going to be victims of a conspiracy between Blink, Vi, and maybe Carl. I like to see what happens should either, or worse, both find out about the conspiracy.
A touching ending. Will she still be Clarice Fergurson, or will be be Clarice Munroe. Unless she thinks she still has a chance with other members of her family, since you mentioned she had several uncles and she got along well with them, I think the latter would be the better choice.
Maybe you should do a small sequel, or make a second chapter to this one, in which Blink meets Evan.
Oh, one thing. I spotted a little errata in your Daytripper fanfic. The way you wrote it, you made it sound that the Seftons met Kurt before mutants were made public. As I recall, it was the other way around. The mutants were made public first, then they met holo-Kurt, if you get my meaning. |
 The Uncanny R-Man 12/5/04 . chapter 1Aww, this was adorable. Now Blink's got a real family. Yay for her!
I mever thoght of 'Ro being the skinny-dipping type, but hey, this is your fic.
I guess the 'Ro/Logan thing is a foregone conclusion, huh? |