i loved the story

epeschaily marron/trunks/ 18 realationship

you truly are great write that come up with some amzing irginal concepts,

but i thought you could explored thr trunks/marron realtion ship more, and hope fully theres more to come in the next story

Sweet! The appearance of Goten, Marron, and Bra! I really liked this, go Marron!

Once again, great story! You really should keep up this good work you're doing. I can't believe these fics are gettin less than ten reviews!

I agree with Midnight Lady. All your stories have no were near as many reviews as they deserve. Keep up the writing.

how no one can review these stories is a complete mystery to me. it is so incredibly hard to find a well-written that makes sense and keeps the characters in character, but you have done it masterfully. it saddens me when i see how few reviews you have, this is BY FAR THE VERY EXTRODINARILY MOST WELL-WRITTEN BEST DRAGONBALL STORY I HAVE EVER READ; and believe me i read a lot of them. :)

Not bad

It's not Marron and Trunks it's 18 and Trunks...oh well, lovin the stories keep up the good work

I absolutly LOVE your stories! I think all of them up to this one could have actually happened in Dragon Ball. (I doubt the maker of this anime would destroy the present timeline) Anyways... I loved it! (even if i don't exactly agree with the Marron/Trunks thing you put in here. I'm a T&P fan. Yes I do know about the age diff) You should write for Akira Toriyamam himself. i swear, your writing is that good! Keep it up! WRITE MORE! WRITE MORE! Please?

"been there, done that, got the t-shirt," HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! that was the best part of the story!

damn, i'm still hungry! oh well! i loooooved this one too! hay! that wuz great! ya know what? nobody is commenting! nooooooooo! these stories don't deserve to be left here to rot! oh the humanity! by kami! i'll make people comment if i have to! oh yeah, great story! *grins goofishly and does an unconcious imitation of Goku-san by putting 1 hand behing her head and making a V sign with the other while laughing* hehe! well, bai bai!