great story

ok dude

nice story

little confusing with the whole keelee thing

but you can't just end it here!

is there a sequel or anything?

MORE!

Go Sugar! Go! I'm your boo forever, and I'll be watching...'I see dead people'...lol!

Nice

please write more or else i'm going to kick your butt...lol...(just kidding)...but please write

more i love the story

Go Me! LOL

dun dun dun! really cool! I guess this is where, as I always say, the plot thickens! keep it up and write more soon!

Cool idea - I like the shape-changing concept (very X-Files-y). It's a little hard to follow because of the format. Some more development of the non-verbal side of the story might help — maybe add more thoughts, describe the scene, describe how the characters deliver their lines, etc. I’m looking forward to seeing more from you!

Hurry up and finish part three and get it out here, I really want to know what happens!

k, that was a little confusing... but a great story anywayz! it would be less confusing if u didnt type it like a script

I lost you-what just happened?

Not a big fan of the format, but the story's OK.

keep it up