Awesome. It's so dark, and seen through another view. Not exactly what I mean. it's like...if you could watch their lives through glasses tinted by Miroku or in the first chapter snago's vision this is what it'd look like. I mean like the phrase seeing the world through rose-tinted glasses. ARGH it's hard to explain properly! Suffice to say this was a very interesting and well-writen story and i hope you post up the second part soon.

~Toodles!~

I'm pretty much speechless here, May. For nothing I could ever say would do this story justice. The dark tone and the prose are just brilliant and I love the flow and the theme of lies. Wonderful, wonderful job, :)

Where do I start? Your words are achingly beautiful, made all the more beautiful and painful by the fact that they could well be true. You are one of the rare people who capture the real sadness behind Sango and Miroku. I am usually not an angst person. Your words caught me somehow, and for the first time I cried while reading a fanfic. I can still remember the feeling of tears rolling down my cheeks when I first read this. Please keep going.

Thank you.

Where do I start? Your words are achingly beautiful, made all the more beautiful and painful by the fact that they could well be true. You are one of the rare people who capture the real sadness behind Sango and Miroku. I am usually not an angst person. Your words caught me somehow, and for the first time I cried while reading a fanfic. I can still remember the feeling of tears rolling down my cheeks when I first read this. Please keep going.

Thank you.

'and i see you standing there,
watchign over me,
and all i can do is cry,
and i see you standing there,
i'm all i'll ever be,
and all i can do is try.'
-Nelly Furtado "Try"

i thought it fit. except for the crying part.

it was real cool how you described Miroku's character, and how he got really obsessed. that happens sometimes... at the time time selfess, as selfish. still trying to understand it. u rule.

This was... rather confusing, even for me. Are you basically trying to show that Sango cannot let her past go, and that Miroku wants her to let it go so he can be her, which is why he thinks he is selfish; powering his needs over hers?
"It is not your time to die." >>... is that a quote from chpt 1 called Missense?
This is a short review (short for me, I usually do three times this length) but I really want to read your last story, titled in French (why's that?) and to encourage you to keep writing. Out of curiousity, what state/city/country do you live in?

Not as angsty as the first chapter, methinks. ^^; I actually liked this one better. Probably because I like stuff from Miroku's point of view. x_X Not a clue why... Maybe because he's what makes the M/S coupling so interesting... xD *shrugs* I dunno. Blah... ¬¬ Lons is harassing me. *goes to review AGS*

I love how thoughtful and kind you made Miroku. Very honest with himself. And I love the different perspectives on the same events with different interpretations and understandings. This was lovely and dark.

Very weird. Like watching life move around you while you're underwater, or surrounded by gauze. It's quite neat, actually.
I can't believe there's only one more part, and I'm interested to see how this ends.

wow, this is amazing, I wish I could write like this! Any suggestions for me? I love it, so much, you are such a great writer, you're writing makes me amazed, amazed at the way you describe the stuff so well, amazed atthe words you ussed, amazed at everything. Thank you for making my day great, though this is depressing it gives me some awesome perspective from a San/Mir writer...loved it, love, always will love it...

this chapter was so pretty! I loved it! keep up the great work on this story! very angsty. ^_~

interesting take, lots of philosophical ideas, wonder if you take philosophy...
anyway, watch out for the verb tenses, there's one instance where you shifted back and forth:

"...I gently TOUCHED her cheek and WHISPERED that I'd be back. I PLACED wards on the outer walls again...That's (should be that was) when I SAW her. Drowning.

She WAS drowning in her own visions...

As I LIFT her, we FALL backwards but the softened morning dirt CUSHIONS the impact on my back."

you start with past tense, is consistent, then switch to present tense. otherwise, it's good story.

Alright, it makes more sense now... Or perhaps it makes sense because it's 3:30 AM here... -ponders this-

i really loved you fic. it was so good and mesmerizing. keep on rocking.

That was QUITE odd... I LOVE IT!! I didn't entirely understand it at first, but a little while in it made more sense. It probably just didn't make sense at first cause I was thinking "One fish, two fish, red fish, blue fish" ...Don't ask. -shakes her head a bit- Right. Anyways, I really like the analogies and the plot. I can hardly wait for Miroku's point of view. ^^