cool! so drama supernational continued!

more!It's good!DJ sounds really dark, a bit like gollum

I'm very intrigued by this concept of the two inner beings interacting with one another. The fight between good and evil is a never ending battle, and what you have so far is taking a very interesting turn (have I used enough 'i' adjectives yet?). I do hope you update soon, it would be not nice to just end it here!

Very intriguing. I love the way you've put Dark Jak's POV, and how he describes unfamiliar feelings. Can't wait for next Chapter. Just love this story.

~Corad~

I dunno what it is I like so much about this, not that it isint good. I love the writing style. The 'not-black' is kinda how I think Dark Jak would put it. *favs*

me wonders what the not black did...me wonders where it went... only time will tell.
keep up the wonderful writing. update soon

and yet another excellent chapter! very well written! this is awsome! will there be yaoi?

oh...and the internal strugle continues...
hehehe that one part with with the hobling around looking for th not dark reminded me og golum..."where is it!?"
can't wait for an update. may your muses be more helpful than this review.
-lenipezsideshow

*glomps* I LOVE IT! You can't stop!! I wanna know what happens! :D I ...think I love you XD

Col! Must continue! this is awesome!

me likey! me likey! light and dark jak clash! cant wait! OMFG OMFG OMFG! -runs around with anticipation-

It took me a while to get into this, but now I like the idea. Very abstract, fun to bend the mind around. I hope the black wins. :F

:D Standoff! I didn't realize you would write more chapters, but it's a good surprise ^_^

nice. i've been waiting for some one to pick up the light jak thing, the not-black, hmm it fits the story. it liked to kill, it liked that alot. man Jak got more issues than i do, and thats pretty sad. you got good word choice and stuff so yeah good job. hope your muses are more helpful than this review.
-lenipez

interesting... but only one problem. isnt there another name you can refer to light jak as instead of "not-black"? otherwise, very well written! I like this! update soon PLEASE!