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| Sly 2006-06-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseThe Randomly capitalized words Are very Distracting |
| Jerry Unipeg 2006-06-11 ch 9,  | abuseGREAT CHAPTER! (*x3) and tranning start. |
| Jerry Unipeg 2006-06-11 ch 8, | abuseGREAT CHAPTER! (*x3) Ren is so right about Ranma. |
| borg rabbit 2006-06-11 ch 9, | abuseFascinating story. Is there any Gold Digger connection? Wes |
| Innortal 2006-06-10 ch 9, | abuseWeird. Very weird. But still good to read. |
| Shakeval 2005-12-08 ch 7, | abusevery interesting. i find it most interesting that nabiki or one of the others haven't accidently shifted while ranma was around. so how will ren react to being hit by a large chi blast? and how long until ranma just snaps and runs off on a "training trip" without plans of coming back...oh lets say america and...maybe atlanta, maybe meets a family with the last name of Diggers, its a thought. great chapter, hope for more |
| Alex Ultra 2005-06-14 ch 7, | abuseInteresting... and you're right, your style does grow on one, although you do have distinct grammar errors outside of dialogue that would need to be cleared up (such as omitting certain words and then that spell-checker thing of replacing words...), but the 'special-ness' (as I am wont to say) of this fic is enough to allow one to overlook such errors as being 'trivial'. As such, I shall grant you an 'A-minus with honors'. I am looking forward to further Contributions. :) Alex Ultra: Trivialities Are Sometimes The Most Important Parts LATER |
| Jerry Unipeg 2005-04-26 ch 7, | abuseI just finish reading chapter 1-7 and I LOVE THEM! |
| Deus-Ex-Machina 2005-04-26 ch 7, | abuseJust one problem, Ren LOST the bet, and therefore CANNOT dictate the terms. If a bet is made, and not terms given, then it is the WINNER of the bet that dictates the terms, and the loser hopes for leniency. |
| Wonderbee31 2005-04-25 ch 7, | abuseInteresting fight with Akane in the dojo, and nice of Ren to poke Ranma ego, and he is right, if all a person would have to do is meow and break Ranma's concentration, then that's half the battle there. |
| Silverscale 2005-04-25 ch 7, | abuse*apearce in front of Kuno and shouts at hi mwhile throwing lightning at the lunatic* I CAN'T TAKE IT ANYMORE! IF YOU WON'T STOP TALKING THEN I WILL MAKE YOU STOP MYSELF! *After twenty five lightning bolts the extra crispy kuno groaned painfully before he fell down, unconscious* At last. *disappeares in a bright flash of light* |
| Innortal 2005-04-25 ch 7, | abuseGreat job. I love that you have returned to this story. You've set things up well. I look forward to the next chapter. Innortal |
| Tai Khan 2005-04-05 ch 6, | abuseInteresting, but confusing as hell. You need to differentiate between the various viewpoints and scene shifts. At one point I thought Akane had suddently change clothes and race. |
| Dragonmage 2005-04-04 ch 6, anon. | abuseOnly one correction: the Battleform is called Crinos not Cronis. That's all. And sorry for that but I am a longtime RPG-Gamer. So thinks like that...disturb the flow of the srory for me. Otherwise its YAY, a fic in the WoD! WOOT WOOT WOT! |
| Wonderbee31 2005-04-04 ch 6, | abuseGood chapter, looking forward to how things go from here, and what happens to Ranma now. Too bad for Akane, as it looks like she's just about lost it now, and may need to have professional help before long. |