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| Ash 2005-01-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseIt was pretty good... I think in some parts you could have made it flow a little better, but other than that, twas great. TTYL! |
| Kuno-Baby 2004-12-23 ch 1,  | abuseIn my opinion, they have to be out of character to be in love. Otherwise, a nice story. |
| Luna12 2004-12-23 ch 1, | abuseI see potential in the story. I think it would flow better if it was told more in third person, with direct quotes from Akane's thoughts. Ranma leaving roses out in the open of the house is unusual -- he would leave leave them in secret by her room or something. You might want to add the incentive for Ranma doing this -- some of his thoughts on the matter. |
| Shino 2004-12-22 ch 1, anon. | abuseI certainly enjoyed your romantic, happy, lovely story. Everyone making stories here, especially you, have great minds and imagination. The owner of this site should make a huge great story writters list... AND YOU SHOULD BE ON THE TOP OF IT!! ^.^ |