Oh,nice fic, Felouse! I really liked the flashback scene, the only problem i see is punctuation, yet it is understandable, s i guess it's not too bad.

I really iked this one!

happy holidays! yay! ^^

Nice Christmas fic!! Shadow was so lovely with that santa hat!! (giggles). The plot is good, a little used, but still very original. And U was so glad there was a kiss on the fic, I was starting to think there wasn't going to be any of that. Anyway, Meri Kurisumasu! (hugs)

Welp, Me thinks you want some critique on your story, so here you go.

The Cons, through this story I can’t help but feel your ‘babying’ your readers with details. In other words, over describing things, or repetition of describing things. Sometimes it’s a good thing, just don’t over do it making your readers fall asleep. And careful of your run-ons.

Pros. The past scene was really cool, and you’ve kept the characters in the same personality throughout the whole thing. Very good. Don’t be afraid of adjectives m’dear! Their your friend! It had a cute overall theme, which is great at the holiday season.

Happy Holidays. ^^ *hug*