Well written and lovely and all of those wonderful things that remind me that i'm reading something that is art and not a game with other people's characters. Did you notice, though, that occasionally your verb tense does not agree with the story/sentence? (example: "“When’s the last time you sleep?”). Don't let my words harsh your mellow though, as it really was beautiful.

That's kinda got an angsty twist... Well, I enjoyed reading. And yes, we will all hope Naruto and GamaBunta exchange sakazuki someday.

Interesting...I like it. ^_^

This is a very good fiction. Really. I love how you pictured Jiraiya. Really good work !

Noxie

This is beautiful...

I liked this story a lot. Sympathized with Jiraiya a whole lot when he summoned Gamabunta while drunk, and the frog told him he was pathetic. Love the fact that it's resolved with a fight. ^.^

You did a great job communicating his frustration with everything, and sometimes it was hard to read because that kind of frustration drives people to do stupid things, but it was a really good fic. Realistic.

~Sam