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| Kouta Aburame 2008-03-18 ch 7, | abuseFirst of all, quite an extensive story, I like Kado's character and the addition of another kingdom to Hyrule. Hopefully I see some political tumoil in the near future. I agree with Hikari when she says this story is a little choppy. What I mean by that is your story tends to abrupty stop in akward places, breaking up its flow and making it choppy. Its a little difficult to fix but I wouldn't worry about it too much. Here's something I found strange while I was reading this. "“I can’t go to the festival, can I?” Link sighed. "Sorry, Link, but my parent’s have invited a lot of important people. Many high-ranked knights and soldiers will be there. The six sages have been invited and allowed to bring as many guests as they please. Many noblemen and women have also been invited, and our guests of honor are the Meyenn family. So you have to be there.” Why isn't Link happy to go? Wasn't he a little disappointed before when he thought he couldn't go? Just some food for thought. Still, this story is far better than I thought. I would've read this earlier, but I ran into a person whose pen name was similar to yours, and his stuff was terrible. Good luck with your future stories and keep up the good work. I hope you can read my story "The Passage of Time" and leave a review. I would gladly appreciate your time and attention. Signed Kouta Aburame |
| Arrhiana Aren Promaleus 2008-02-17 ch 2, | abuseHi. It sounds like you copied Aberrant Bliss's And She Waited. No offense or anything, but yeah, it definitely sounds plagiarized. |
| estabadabesta 2007-12-16 ch 16, anon. | abusei really luv this story. ive bin readin it 4 a while & thought it was gr8 so i decided 2 review. i can tell how much effort u put in and i think if u keep writin the way u do ur gonna b gr8. ive read ur other storie i luv them 2 please keep it up! |
| blazer227 2007-06-27 ch 3, | abuselol i like zeke, pirates are cool with their aye and matey and stuff. good job |
| blazer227 2007-06-27 ch 2, | abusewell, even though its done, its good! |
| blazer227 2007-06-27 ch 1, | abusehey great story even though its done 1 well i should say chapter.. but i wanted to read seeing truth i think it was so I'm strting t read this one! its good |
| Chips Dip 2007-05-08 ch 34, | abuseGAH!! this is so depressing! >.> I hope you get to Zelda soon >. |
| Chips Dip 2007-05-08 ch 32, anon. | abuseokay...so...that last part WAY confused me...did she jump because she knew it would take her somewhere? or did she jump becaus eshe hated herself for everything she cause everyone to go through? suicide? she doesn't seem like the type...and when the heck did you start using curses? anyways, neat chp |
| chips dip 2007-05-08 ch 31, anon. | abuseso I was WRONG!! he is coming back! aurgh! >.< anyways, great chapter, I really like it. |
| Chips Dip 2007-05-08 ch 30, | abuseOMG!! this chapter was so figgin CUTE! ^^ so is Jade going to sign the contract?! huh? is she? ^^ okay, don't answer that, I'll read the next chapter. |
| Chips Dip 2007-05-08 ch 29, | abuseI'm going to review every chapter I missed! okay? ... POOR JADE!! I really can't imagine how she feels right now! Just trying to think abut it, makes me sick! Wow...so Ken's brother is really gone now. >.> I'm assuming the wedding is next...or maybe somethign bad will happen to Jade that she WILL be accused of some crime...^^ amazing chapter. |
| Chips Dip 2007-05-08 ch 28, | abuseHi...blumoon! (did you change your name?) hehe...your probably ferociously mad at me for not R and Ring...but, I'M SO SORRY! I've been way lazy to read the story, so yeah, I apologize. Anyways, ^^ This chapter was great, and I loved how the "earthlings" tricked Isabella to staying away form Kado. ^^ lol. |
| ZombieDragon 2007-03-11 ch 34, | abuseI know this is a late review...but this story was just so awesome, I couldn't just LEAVE without saying something...so here I am... AWESOME STORY! I like the twist thing at the end...meh, i'll be reading the sequel now. XD |
| Eternal_Flame 2006-12-05 ch 34, anon. | abuseHoly crap, the best story i've read in a while. Couldn't stop reading until it was finished. Wish i could write as ood as you. *Runs off to read sequel* |
| A for Annonymous 2006-12-02 ch 34, anon. | abuseOH MY GOD! That was...MY GOD! In the sequal, Kado better get to marry Jade... or else... |