PLZZ FINISH THIS STORY!

WOHO! YAY! JAMES AND CHARLOTTE ARE MARRIED!

WTF? JOHNNY SHOULD'VE WON!! DAMN IT! NO! DON'T DIE SWEET JAMES!

THIS STORY ROCKS! I'M SO HAPPY FOR JAMES!

Review time . . .
There's not really anything bad I can say about it! I didn't see any obvious mistakes!
Your writing has a wonderful flow to it!
:D
Your OC is good so far too.
Not seeming to be a Mary Sue, which is always a good thing.

Hehe. Reminds me of my mom. Just goes on and on and on...:)

:D

Aw :D
I just love when he starts talking about her.

Oh man, lol. I'm feeling nervous for him! Here's hoping all goes well!

Yay~!

YAy~

Poor thing. There's nothing that can cure the lonely blues :(
I hope he comes home soon!

Finding Neverland. There couldn't have been any better way to sum up how Charlotte has changed James' life. This was a very nice chapter to read. I went over it twice just for the sake of feeling giddy about James and Charlotte. Good jobn!

James' feelings are well-balanced out. HE loves Charlotte and the boys equally, though of course, there is much more love and longing for Charlotte. You made sure to even out his feelings for both parties, not leaving out the boys despite James' romance with Charlotte. Also, the conversations in this chapter are very interesting and engaging to read, especially when Mary comes into the picture and things start looking ugly). The feelings and thoughts of the characters are very real as well. All in all, a very good chapter.

An honest chapter. The internal conflict of James served as a very strong hold that balanced out everything else in this chapter. Also, I have to congratulate you on your ability to integrate facts into your story with ease. You do it in the most smooth manner wherein it doesn't sound like a boring history lesson. Great job.