oh, nice start, thought i think the timeline is completely wrongg... so i saw cheryl instead os alessa.

very nice writting, i love it.

Well that certainly was an interesting turn about. XD Tiny Claudia child reminded me of one I watched once. I like the idea of the fairy tale, although I would have thought Alessa would have been the one who drew the pictures since they look so much like a child's drawing. I read somewhere that Vincent was born five years after Alessa (three after Claudia) so at first the summary made me laugh, but I really like what you've done with it. :3

Write more, it is good!

Very nice. I'm not entirely sure about the timeline here, since Vincent would be roughly Alessa's age, but I like it nonetheless. Clever use of details in the game. Good luck when/if you choose to write more.

Yay! I'm happy that I got to read a snippet of this before!! ^o^ I love how you incorporated the fairy tale, such a minor detail of the game, into this story. You've turned it into something major and interesting. The whole thing about the monsters in the sketch book was a nice little effect to. ^_^ Please please please write more? v.v or I will be sad...

Awesome start. I think it has great potential.