I absolutely love this story. It's a perfect character study of an area in the series which really isn't explored that much and I think you really touched into the emotions of this character beautifully. Well done.

ok you piece of shit lissen to me and lissen closely!(dont care about my fucking spelling) ok fisrt DONT FUCK AROUND WITH OTHER PEOPLES SHIT! (meaning u brianless dult that you shouldnt RAT on people cuz trust me i will BRING YOU DOWN!) i know what you have been doing!(telling the ff.net people about other peoples lemons ! my god are you THAT INOCENT AND AFRIAD!) fuck kid get a life and GROW UP! well if that didnt go through you little brian then you truley r hopeless and yes i pulled (o-what-is-it? an Angel-Chan!) i RATED on you! HAHAH you may not think it but there is shit that is not aloud on here that you have done (not saying its just this story!) and you will be geting reviews like this from more then me (BE SURE OF THAT!) AND MORE THEN 1! so BITCH at ya soon (if your acount still exists!):) c yas jackass

i like this twist!

just make sure you don't pair krillen with 18 or i swear i'll flame you!

but so far, it's a really interesting plot!

Yea, definitely keep writing. I haven't read anything like this before, and I hope you put up another chapter soon

Huh? What was that? Who was that about? I don't get it...

This is interesting! Please write more! 8)

I hope you cotinue this...You havce me on edge. I know the Cousins are 17 and 18, but who is the main character.