I liked that story. It was covered in less than a chapter, unless you plan on updating it or something, and it was very detailed,and it appeared to cover everything you wanted to cover. Zephyr would make a good jak and daxter character i think. She definitely seems to have the personality. I happen to like the song drowning (in a) pool('s) of bodies too heh (like a lot of people out there). keep up the good work!

Yay! I liked it! Zephyr's cool...hehehe