|Reviews for Ace Combat 5: The Ace Squadron|
| Antoine 4/13/10 . chapter 2
Some of the text was a little awkward to read. None of the text came in red, so if you were depending on that to make it clear whose side was speaking, it did not work. Also, there were several errors with word choice, spelling, or sentence structure. It's "beautiful" and "skinned," not "beutiful" and "skined." Also, "to" means toward or "in order for," while you want to use "too" to mean "also" or "in excess." It could use some more careful proofreading to make it read more professionally, and a warning in the description that it is AU (Alternate Universe) or otherwise intentionally not canonically accurate could be helpful in keeping that aspect of the story from turning some people off. If you tell people up front "some details of the timeline have been changed to suit artistic taste," they will be able to take it better, I think.
Overall, it needs work before I can really see whether or not it has more potential.
| sheepeater244 8/12/06 . chapter 1
put some more crap in like the booger man and bananas and stuff like that to make it funni
sincerly people looking 4 a laugh
P.s bananas rulz
| Havokness 1/2/05 . chapter 2
Well yeah this is kinda AC5 but this is my view of what happened. So thing might not be the same as it is in the games.
| Stonehenge 1/1/05 . chapter 2
Its a good chapter. Though...I would suggest you use a bit more descriptions to compliment and support the dialogue. Really just think of how your favorite book is written and write like that. But how you write it is up to you.
Someparts of this chapter messed with my head. If you highlighted the text in read in your publisher it didn't show up here.
Keep it rolling.
| Stradivarium 1/1/05 . chapter 2
If this is parallel to AC05, then shouldn't the bombing of St. Hewlett occur first before Wardog escorts the president? Shouldn't Yuktobania's declaration of war happen before the bombing of St. Hewlett? Anyways, this is very nice. Keep up the good work!
| Stonehenge 1/1/05 . chapter 1
Good start. I can't really say much since its a short opening. Just be decriptive and percise in the air battles.
| Havokness 12/31/04 . chapter 1
Yes it is, I changed the name.
| Harrie 12/30/04 . chapter 1
sounds good so far, but i have to know, does this parallel AC05