Yay! My first fanfiction I ever finished
I love this. Honestly, I usually end up reading stories about tortured people that are really bad quality and because of such quality, I end up losing interest when something non-angsty is happening. I love such stories, which is ironic considering my traumatic past :p You kept my attention and your writing talent is amazing. For goodness' sake, you're making me procrastinate my own writing so I could read yours! I will now move on to your sequel
Also, again, in this chapter she says the kids are dead again and then she'll save then ._.

Almost done, but a question in this chapter: who does she mean by "them" in "you killed them?"
Does she mean Beregil and Borogor or the children? Because it sounds like the children but she keeps saying how he'll kill them if he returns

I Love your Story. I have been reading non stop just so i can find out what happens next. At first i found it had to get into the story because i find it hard to read stories where little kids are the main character. But i kept reading because i wanted to see how it progressed. I also find it believable the the Man who kidnapped her was not sorry that her took her. For the kind of people who take people and not usually sorry that they have taken someone. I Really appreciated that even tho she was with the fellowship for so long she was not immediately every ones best friend or in love with one of the men. i could keep going about all the points that i like about how realistic your story is. If it was not for the fact that it is a fictional story. Well done! now i am off to start reading the second book.

Yay fellowship! Two questions bugging me:
What did Borogor whisper to Beregil? What was the significance of Hammel's sentimental goodbye to Borogor?

Yes! I've been waiting for a battle-hardened Gúthwyn for so long! I do like Hammel and Haiweth but I have to be honest and say I feel they really tie her down and I hope they don't remain main characters forever

I have to review before I continue
I absolutely love the format of this chapter. You magnificently created a state of mind for the reader so I share Gúrhwyn's experience of a busy mind. Overall your way of writing is so amazing, I wish I could emulate it just as well for the novel I am working on. One can only hope

I don't usually review as I'm working on reading an entirety of a story, but I absolutely love your final sentence

I saw you used a few Evanescence lyrics for your story, but I thought the poet and the pendulum by Nightwish seemed to fit even better for alone. I don't know if you know the song, so here are the lyrics:

The end.

The songwriter's dead.
The blade fell upon him
Taking him to the white lands
of empathica,
of innocence
Empathica
Innocence

The dreamer and the wine
Poet without a rhyme
A widow writer torn apart by chains of Hell

One last perfect verse
It's still the same old song
Oh Christ, how I hate what I have become

Take me home

Get away, run away, fly away
Lead me astray to dreamer's hideaway
I cannot cry 'cause the shoulder cries more
I cannot die, I, a whore for this cold world
Forgive me,
I have but two faces
One for the world,
One for God,
save me
I cannot cry 'cause the shoulder cries more
I cannot die, I, a whore for this cold world

My home was there and then, those meadows of heaven
Adventure-filled days
One with every smiling face

Please, no more words
Thoughts from a severed head
No more praise,
Tell me once my heart goes right

Take me home

Get away, run away, fly away
Lead me astray to dreamer's hideaway
I cannot cry 'cause the shoulder cries more
I cannot die, I, a whore for this cold world
Forgive me,
I have but two faces
One for the world,
One for God,
save me
I cannot cry 'cause the shoulder cries more
I cannot die, I, a whore for this cold world

Sparkle my scenery
With Turquoise waterfall
With beauty underneath
The ever free

Tuck me in beneath the blue
Beneath the Pain,
Beneath the rain
Goodnight kiss for a child in time
Swaying blade my lullaby

On the shore we sat and hoped
Under the same pale moon
Whose guiding light chose you,
Chose you all

"I'm afraid, I'm so afraid.
being raped, again and again, and again
I know I will die alone
but loved.

You live long enough to hear the sounds of guns,
Long enough to find yourself screaming every night,
Live long enough to see your friends betray you.

For years I've been strapped unto this altar.
Now I only have three minutes and counting.
I just wish the tide would catch me first and give me
a death I always longed for."

2nd robber to the right of Christ
Cut in half - infanticide
The world will rejoice today
As the crows feast on the rotting poet

Everyone must bury their own
No pack to bury the heart of stone
Now hes home in hell, serves him well
Slain by the bell, tolling for his farewell

The morning dawned upon his altar
Remains of the dark passion play
Performed by his friends without shame
Spitting on his grave as they came

Get away, run away, fly away
Lead me astray to dreamer's hideaway
I cannot cry 'cause the shoulder cries more
I cannot die, I, a whore for this cold world
Forgive me,
I have but two faces
One for the world,
One for God,
save me
I cannot cry 'cause the shoulder cries more
I cannot die, I, a whore for this cold world

"Today, in the year of our Lord, 2005
Tuomas was called from the cares of the world
He stopped crying at the end of each beautiful day.
The music he wrote had too long been without silence.
He was found naked and dead,
With a smile in his face, a pen and 1000 pages of erased text."

Save me

Be still, my son
Youre home
Oh when did you become so cold?
The blade will keep on descending
All you need is to feel my love

Search for beauty, find your shore
Try to save them all, bleed no more
You have such oceans within
In the end, I will always love you

The beginning.

I'll be waiting for you to start part two! I loved it though all the pain it made me feel for her! Man, I wasn't expecting to finish this part, but it was so good! I started this morn and finished at seven! Now I wish I had slowed down my reading!. Oh well.

I've sadly reached the end of this magnificent story and I really hope the sequel is posted soon. It has been thoroughly engaging reading, Thank you xx :D

This is demonic! What an absolute masterpiece! I was actually scared!

TQ

This story is darkness incarnate. What horror!

TQ

Truly amazing! I've spent the last 6 hours pouring over this! WOW! I cannot wait to see what happens to our poor heroine next!

Come on! isn't someone going to slap her across the face with a positive reason Or when is the stick going to snap?

damn i thought she was going to go all out rage on his elf ass but i guess not i still going to read tho be