dude, if something like this happened to me, i'd think i was going insane. i fully understand where Cobryn and the rest are coming from, haha

creepy dream. :D

very good. i'm not noticing any more mistakes, so your writing must have been improving

the part where Guthwyn was released was so cool. i know i shouldn't like torture, but it was cool nontheless

aha! so thats how Guthwyn gets to Mordor. very good an unexpected. i liked the way it went down. it fit perfectly

oh my. that was absolutely craziness. that scene might give me nightmares, but i doubt it. scary scary.

very good, though

"Just yesterday, the clan had decided that it was best to switch Cobryn with the boy, hoping to place him with slaves who were closer to his age. Feride and Onyveth had certainly not filled that requirement." ...this confused me. shouldn't Onyveth be only two years younger than him, while Guthwyn and Chalibeth are at least four years older?

i thought that it was very cheesy that the same day Abaudia told her she could use the overseer's weapon the wargs broke free.

but that ok, like i've said there isn't enough cheese in life

"Dread playfully stabbed Gúthwyn, leaping around her with delicate ease and diving back to produce more anxiety." that sentence is pure genius.

aww, it's so sad that she thinks her siblings are dead.

i didn't notice anymistakes, but i was wondering something. could you give me the link to the name translator you used? i'm having trouble creating authentic sounding names for one of my fics.

please and thanks, Coliathe

very good. in my opinion, these chapters are dragging a little, but it's still good. i noticed that you used the wrong form of your/you're a few times

very very interesting. so did Grima uh rape Chalibeth then?

don't tell me! i'll find out on my own. haha

so i'm a little confused about something. Mûlnothrim is just one group of people who work at Isengard, right? sorry, but i'm very slow right now

wow, that was unexpected. i thought he was taking her to Mordor, since it says she was a slave of Sauron. oh well. thanks for the surprise! )

very interesting chapter. the part where he dragged her like a cow was...interesting.

haha, i love your writing style. it really fits the storyline

i like the dream sequence. it really gives you a look into what matters most in Guthwyn's life.

i didn't notice any mistakes, so good job. :)