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Protector Of The Nameless 2008-07-13 ch 11,	abuseOkay, let me get this straight. Yugi killed himself and now he and Atemu are together forever. I was really confused at the end. I thought it was one of Yugi's tests in this chapter. Oh well. I worshiped this story! Please write more stories!
Yizuki 2008-03-11 ch 11,	abuseSo when Yugi stabbed the doll he killed himself and turned into a doll as well? I don't get it.
Yizuki 2008-03-10 ch 4,	abuseI would love to read more, but I have to be somewhere tomorrow. I'll have to finish reading then.
jin1377 2007-11-12 ch 2,	abusethis is so gonna be good! this is so gonnac be good! this is so gonna be good! i love the games in stories! bye!
jin1377 2007-11-12 ch 1,	abuseomg! this sounds like a really good story! i wander what's gonna happen... really 3 chaps, ne? 8! but that's no problem! not at all... i love long stories but it can take me long to read like yami no game... i'm reading it for 2 days and i'm yet at chap 10 i'll read till 20 today and than there're 13 or 12 châps laft. (sigh) i love this chapter! bye!
XShootingStarX 2007-08-22 ch 11,	abuseeh? I don't get it. How come they all ended up back in Domino, and everyone forgot about Yugi and stuff? so Yugi killed himself? and at the end is Sugoroku, not Yugi? and how did he know about Atemu. oh and you kept saying died, in stead of dead. other than that, it's pretty good. the ending was a bit unexpected, i thought they would end up together =( poor yugi.
XShootingStarX 2007-08-22 ch 6,	abusei like it. very cute fic. and the chapters a nice and long, sometimes too long...but that's just me. i couldn't help but notice though, there's quite a few mistakes. like you wrote flirted instead of fluttered, and graduations, when i think you mean congratualtions. and some other things. i think you should get a beta, then your fics will be even better =)
ReaperRain 2007-05-22 ch 11,	abuseThe story was beautiful, but the ending...argh, why did it have to be sad? I hate sad endings! (sniffle) Must go cry now... ReaperRain
Punctuation fiend! 2007-05-21 ch 1, anon.	abuseUnfortunately, this isn't a comment to rave about how wonderful the story may be (as I wouldn't know, having quit due to the forthcoming reason), but is a grammar grievance. Ellipses, also known as "...", are to be used sparingly. Using complete sentences is a much better way to write a story. Not including the author's notes or anything of the sort, you used "..." four hundred and fifteen times in the first chapter alone. In an average, well written story, you might find the ellipses twenty times, and almost all of those would be in character dialog. Unfortunately, the complete lack of solid sentence structure makes this story too dull to read, and I gave up after the first two paragraphs; at least by leaving this review, though, you'll know why. Next time try using some variety, with colons and semi-colons and periods and commas and maybe even an interrobang or two. Your readers will thank you for caring.
ReaperRain 2007-05-19 ch 6,	abuseWow, so good! I'm only half way through the story at the moment (heavens, it's so long!) and although I'm immersed, I think I need to take a break from reading before my eyes go funny. I'll continue some other time, and then I'll be sure to review when I'm finished. Such a wonderful, moving story! ReaperRain
Serzie 2007-03-20 ch 11,	abuseSo what? did they turn into dolls or something? o.o does that mean that Yugi could forever live in the Dark Realm with Yami?
LithiumLi3 2007-03-02 ch 6,	abuseVery good story thus far. I haven't finished what is there right now, but I love it so far. NICE AND LONG! My new IDOL!
Yami-Yugi3 2007-01-26 ch 11,	abusecries What a sad ending!
Darkling221 2007-01-01 ch 5,	abuseAww this is soo cute! Dont worry I always hated Anzu! die Anzu die!
Darkling221 2007-01-01 ch 1,	abuse...this was amazing... ...that was the cuttest story yet! I LOVE YOU!

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