It was really good, except that I got a little bit confused because you switched Donovan and Talmage around. Talmage runs the place, and Donovan wants to backstep but doesn't. But other than that it was very good.

Cute! very cute!

You put an amazing level of detail in your story! And I liked the part that it was all a ploy meant to surprise, even if Frank Parker was a wee bit cranky about it. Very nice!