What a touching story. I loved how you desribed Leon's thoughts as he reflected back on Rinoa and his previous life before Hollow Bastion and Traverse Town. You really described Leon's sadness of losing Rinoa quite well (it's almost tear jerking to a point). I clare there was a little "Hero Worship" when Leon described Sora's behavior around him, but that's probably me. My favorite line concerning the young man was "I guess he hasn't seen a lot of people with facial scars." I cracked up. All in all, Its a good story. Worthy of its drama.

Keep up the good work!

Sakura123

that really sad. But I do agree, Riona wouldn't be anywhere but dead. Maleficent would have wanted her, and she wouldn't have given in.

*sniff* so sad...

brilliantly done, tho! i've always played around with the rinoa concept for kingdom hearts in my head, but i've never done anything with it. you did good!

eerian

Aww ;-; Poor Squall. You've captured his thoughts very well - not something most people manage to do. The name "Hyne" does seem a bit overused, but as long as it's not abused that can pass.

Though, there always was that timeline issue that never will be solved regarding KH being an AU for Squall and the others. The manga gives a tiny bit of insight, saying that Aerith, Leon and Yuffie were all very small children when they were kicked out of Hollow Bastion ( http:/w w ) But I think you worked around that well )

Wow, this is made me a bit sad :(

but i liked it at the end. but i got to say my favorite line is :

"I think that if we'd ever had a kid, he'd have looked kind of like Sora and bounced around shouting "Whatever! Whatever!" "

(BTW: thank you for the comments on my story. and i have fixed my mistakes. thank you for pointing that out to me :D)