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frankly, i'm confused.
where are you going with this?
mt suggestion: read your work after you think you've finished. trust me, it will help.
till next...

continue

You have me hooked. I really want to see how you tie this together.

This seems a teensy bit rushed (in reference to the first chapter). I found a few minor spelling errors, but most of it is common stuff like hitting the key next to the one you meant to hit. The second chapter is...horribly short... and there's a "1)" just standing out. I'm not sure if parts of your story were deleted, or this is just a filler, but the second chapter has to
A) be extended
B) be replaced with an actual chapter
or
C)Get scrapped and have the second chapter completely rewritten

Has potential to be good, I'll have to check this out later...

Good chapter.

Very good start.

Not bad. This has promise. Seen MY work?