It's TOO short! Write more.

- Also, you write bad things about me on other sites without telling me, and that makes me mad. What's up with that?

weird story. if its going to be a diary make it sound like he really wrote it! don't make it sound like a novel

wow. thats areally touching. Poor hatori. It must suck to feel like that. *cries* well...good job anyways!

So sad, don't go totally Ha'ri Tohru like u know, fluff or anything but very good! Oh, Kana is spelled with one n, k? Cool luv it! Very well written!

-Piper