 Rori Potter 2009-11-06 . chapter 30Oh wow. Update soon. Good luck on rewritting this. |
 sparksfire-51 2009-11-03 . chapter 30i can be a beta for your story
just tell me what i need to do |
 sparksfire-51 2009-11-03 . chapter 29i love the twins! they have always had a brain
and the snakes!
they are hillarious |
 sparksfire-51 2009-11-03 . chapter 26it was a very imformative chapter
no need to worry about it being boring, every story needs a chapter where the information is
such as the spells on your last one
ahahha severus was trying to think and got paranoid |
 sparksfire-51 2009-11-03 . chapter 25the founders have AWESOME spells
how do you remember the name of all of them? |
 sparksfire-51 2009-11-02 . chapter 11holy ** evan harrison!
you are brilliant |
 sparksfire-51 2009-11-02 . chapter 9remus is sweet, well, he was always the smart one |
 sparksfire-51 2009-11-01 . chapter 1i...i love it |
 dragonlilly1993 2009-10-07 . chapter 5hm interesting! i love the "house"! GREAT CHAPTER I LOVE IT! THIS STORY IS FANTASTIC! |
 Salamander Hanzo 2009-09-30 . chapter 1nice |
 Dark Vampgirl 2009-08-16 . chapter 22cool story I really enjoy reading it and I like your writing style. |
 Veritas in Sanguine 2009-07-27 . chapter 30Hm... I would have to agree that the angel part of the story appeared to be pretty much irrelevant, except as a quick way to display pain all at once in the beginning. I also agree with pretty much everything you've said in this note regarding changes, although the cutting was another way to show that, and if you took out both, it would take more effort to give readers the same empathy. Now, generally I don't particularly like Ginny, but I think you did a decent job of portraying her in a way that I don't have any cause to hate. The weakness is, however, a little exaggerated and confusing, as I seem to remember Ginny developing rather quickly into a powerful, stubborn, determined, and self-sure teen. I recall the first chapter or so feeling more than a bit rushed, and I hope that you'll be able to bring this all together into a big, cohesive, whole.
I look forward to your revisions,
ViS |
 Hannah42992 2009-07-08 . chapter 29aw don't stop there. i love the story so far. will luna find out what this shadow is? is it dangerous? i like that the founders are together and are friends. i like that the death eaters that wanted to get away from voldemort was able to get a chance at a better life. will severus and harry become friends again? great job...please continue with it...=) |
 Shiori Kazama 2009-06-07 . chapter 30Aw. But i REALLY love this story... |
 Red Moon Ninja 2009-06-01 . chapter 30I'm sad that you think this story is no good. Personally I think it has a great deal of potential. But I am happy that you're not fully giving up hope on it. The only thing I really didn't like was the whole 'sucking up to Dumbledore' plot that Harry/Salazar/Evan/Dagger/Silverfang has going on. (That was a whole lot of names) But I admit that it does have purpose. Personally I like Ginny being a Founder. I was always fond of her. I agree with you on getting rid of the whole 'cutting' thing. It just doesn't fit. Besides that I'm good. I hope that this has helped you. But you probally already started re-writing. Ah well. I'm gonna go read your new version, if it's up, now. Bye! |