Oh wow. Update soon. Good luck on rewritting this.

i can be a beta for your story
just tell me what i need to do

i love the twins! they have always had a brain
and the snakes!
they are hillarious

it was a very imformative chapter
no need to worry about it being boring, every story needs a chapter where the information is
such as the spells on your last one
ahahha severus was trying to think and got paranoid

the founders have AWESOME spells
how do you remember the name of all of them?

holy ** evan harrison!
you are brilliant

remus is sweet, well, he was always the smart one

i...i love it

hm interesting! i love the "house"! GREAT CHAPTER I LOVE IT! THIS STORY IS FANTASTIC!

nice

cool story I really enjoy reading it and I like your writing style.

Hm... I would have to agree that the angel part of the story appeared to be pretty much irrelevant, except as a quick way to display pain all at once in the beginning. I also agree with pretty much everything you've said in this note regarding changes, although the cutting was another way to show that, and if you took out both, it would take more effort to give readers the same empathy. Now, generally I don't particularly like Ginny, but I think you did a decent job of portraying her in a way that I don't have any cause to hate. The weakness is, however, a little exaggerated and confusing, as I seem to remember Ginny developing rather quickly into a powerful, stubborn, determined, and self-sure teen. I recall the first chapter or so feeling more than a bit rushed, and I hope that you'll be able to bring this all together into a big, cohesive, whole.

I look forward to your revisions,

ViS

aw don't stop there. i love the story so far. will luna find out what this shadow is? is it dangerous? i like that the founders are together and are friends. i like that the death eaters that wanted to get away from voldemort was able to get a chance at a better life. will severus and harry become friends again? great job...please continue with it...=)

Aw. But i REALLY love this story...

I'm sad that you think this story is no good. Personally I think it has a great deal of potential. But I am happy that you're not fully giving up hope on it. The only thing I really didn't like was the whole 'sucking up to Dumbledore' plot that Harry/Salazar/Evan/Dagger/Silverfang has going on. (That was a whole lot of names) But I admit that it does have purpose. Personally I like Ginny being a Founder. I was always fond of her. I agree with you on getting rid of the whole 'cutting' thing. It just doesn't fit. Besides that I'm good. I hope that this has helped you. But you probally already started re-writing. Ah well. I'm gonna go read your new version, if it's up, now. Bye!