well written.

Oh god...you killed both of them!

*sob* Romeo and Juliet style. Cute. Excuse me, I gotto go read something cheerful.

That was just so...hopeless and sad.

very romeo and julietish...what will the others say when they find out?

pretty good. kinda remindes me of Romeo and Juliete(i probably spelled that wrong)

Sad

that soooooooooo saaaaaaad

A little Romeo and Juliet for my tastes. I think it was a little unbelievable,but other than that, It was an okay fic.

*blinks* Um...No offense or anything, but that was just totally unbelievable. The characters were totally off, and it just wasn't that well written. Like, at all. The bold text got to be annoying after pretty much the first line, and clearer paragraph breaks and more of them would definitely be an improvement. It was also just totally cliche.

BUT...it has potential. With a bit of work, it could maybe turn into a grade A fic. You probably just haven't been writing that long (my first stories totally sucked), so with a bit more practice you could probably turn into a first class writer. Good luck.

It was short, but sweet. Really sad and all but great job!

Wow some of the Animorphs writers can actually write. You yes are one of them. even though I think that it could have been just a tad longer. God isn't angst great?

That's pretty cliche and OOC. The whole R/J mentality doesn't fit with J/C.

hmm... "I love you *****!" presses the trigger to her head, and...

That was Romeo and Juliet-ish, don't you think? ) Hey, I'm starting a new fanfic database, and I'm hoping to make it the largest collection of anifanfic on the web, so could you e-mail me please? Kewl!