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Reviews for: Beyond the Rainbow
biancamella
2005-03-01 . chapter 1
Aw...that was cute!
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2005-01-07 . chapter 1
Largest collection of bad Aurikku poetry? Actually, I don't think it's bad...actually, I think it's pretty good. I suggest working on the rhythm a bit; try dividing the lines up differently, as the way they are currently divided interferes with rhythm and flow. However, the words themselves are good - it has potential. Last but not least, I like the fact that your Rikku simply remembers Auron, and longs for him from a distance; I can most certainly see her having an enormous crush on/unrequited love for him, but I doubt they would ever have actually gotten together. So, all around, good job!
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