Awesome story! I really enjoyed reading this.

Awesomeness! How you portrayed the Sand Sibling's thoughts was very well done, and the descriptions of the scenery and surroundings is very clever. I loved how you showed Gaara's fighting nature with Shukaku, and how sometimes he just wants to give in and let whatever happen. And this following sentence you wrote in chapter four, well, I fell in love with: "Lifted his face to the stars, his expression seemed to say: «I’m still here, you see?»."
Overall, nice work. I'll be keeping an eye out for your future works. But I can only read English...^^
Thanks for writing and translating such a cool piece.
Love,
~ come-by-chance
P.S. Just a question before I go - what are those arrow things?

Good story ^^ I love it.

Its a really good fic so far. I like how its written, but, with those triangle things (

I really like how you portrayed the sand siblings here, I think you did a great job and captured their emotions and personalities really well, especially with Temari and Gaara. I especially like chapter 3 and 4, and how well you wrote what Gaara must have been feeling at the time this happened. You made him more...sensitive and "emotional" in a way one would never expect from such a character. I like the ending too, wraps the the story nicely...with a hint of hope and the start of a "new" life. Good job on the fic.

and, also, I'd like to thank you for reviewing my fic as well. :)

Hi, thanks for the review on my fic. I haven't gotten around to update lately because I don't have the time. Anyways, you started off well with your fanfic. I suggest you put more spaces in between paragraphs though. I was confused if they were having a flashback or some thought or speaking to one another at first with the > and yeah.
Still, overall...Good work. ^_^

See? I finally did get around to reading your fic ^^

I think it's really good! The only thing I could suggest is try to put in more gaps in the paragraphs - I sometimes find it really hard to read really long paragraphs on the computer...

But other than that, it's a very good fanfiction ^^ Especially since it's the first english one you've posted.

Keep writing!

you may want to consider using quotation marks when characters speak, its sort of hard to read that arrow things. other than that, I like how they're portrayed, they sort of seem like lost children- which is what I imagine they probably felt like at this point in the manga. So I think you captured their emotions quite well.

Holy! Your fic was the one I was so desperate about reading that I went to my Italian teacher (I’m actually quite shy) for her to translate! I knew I’ve read it before! J Oh, yeah… you should use quotation marks for the people speaking, because using < makes it a bit confusing; thoughts can be expressed in different ways (you can use ‘.’, Or italics, like in my fics. Or you can use other stuff, just inform the readers that it’s the way you’ve done it). I also recommend that you put spaces on different paragraphs. And yeah, I love this chapter. Update soon.

Interesting. I would like to have a look at your next installment, so please update. I haven't read book 16 yet, so I apologize for not having been able to review any mistakes on that part. You've kept them in character, don't worry about that. The story format can be a bit confusing... But I liked the story overall.