This was outstanding. Not only were the words good, but I had a few laughs. You described everything well and proper. I'm happy, I suggested this to my pal. Thanks for doing a good story. BTW. Hope to see more.

Wow, two chapters in a row is good, for any authors who don't have much time on their hands (such as myself, unfortunately--creative writin in college takes away all other projects). Your sense of humor definitely leaves this Silent Hill story in a different taste, but in a good way. The only suggestion I have is that there does seem to be a bit too much exposition going on (stating the obvious, showing not telling). If Orson Welles were looking over this as a script, he'd say that there was too much directing going on. Trying being just a tad more distant and explain some things in shorter, practical sentences. This is less of a problem at towards the end, though. Later then.

Well now, nice to see you back in business. Your story skills are a little rusty, with just a tad too much exposition. However, you still have those juices flowing and the humor in this story is not lost to the audience. This is still an enjoyable read.
Lookin' forward to the next chapter.

hey there! i'm back! i have been so busy lately. and my review/author/story alerts and private messages have not been functioning. they still don't work. i have to check everything manually, and i can't receive pm's at all. that kinda sucks. anyways, wow. this chapter was incredibly creepy. that thing in the bottle freaked me out. good work with that. i think this story definitely has the desired effect. when i've got some time, i'll read some more. ttyl,
marina(wings)

wow. that was creepy. they should really make a video game out of your story. that was crazy. when i have time, i'll read more.

this is some creepy stuff. very interesting. excellent descriptions. once again, when i have more time, i will definitely read more.

this story is really interesting. when i get more time, i will definitely check out the rest of it. i like the way you describe everything. i can see it all in my mind. good work. ttyl!
~marina(wings)~

I really enjoyed this. I've been away from fanfiction for so long that I had to read through the whole story again just to make sure I hadn't forgotten anything. You created the scenes well and I can't really fault much!

By the way I deleted "Caged in the Darkness" as I think it needs to go under severe editing before going up again!

Ugh... blindness is quite a downer.
Is that copy clone from the Cow and Chicken cartoon? +)
Glad to see you still writing.
Waitin' for the next chapter.

it was good

Someone should call the exterminator... or open up a circus. That rat should fit in with either place, and you get so many bright colors when those infants explode. +)
Your best chapter yet. I cannot wait until the next chapter.
...I'll just sing the doom song while I wait.
"Doom doom doom, doom doom..."

I LOVE the look into the modern day life of those living in the other realm. Its both funny and intriguing at the same time.
Love how the nightmare is getting worse. This is definetly your best work.

Aw, Fisk sounded so cool. +(
Anyway, when it comes to Silent Hill, only the imaginative could ever truly bring it to life, and your creatures and situations are definetly most vivid.
I look forward to more later.

I'm never looking at migraines the same way again. Alien anyone? +)
Sorry that I'm a day late, but I'm here.
Wonderful development. You do nightmares very well.

...And thats why I hate kids. -_-;
This is definetly a new look on the whole Silent Hill alternate dimension spiel.
You can be very creative when you want to.
I finish the story tomorrow.