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Ranmaleopard 10/4/11 . chapter 1
wow this is really interesting please continue!
Kittycat96 7/10/06 . chapter 1
It's great! Can you make more?
Saggit 3/7/01 . chapter 1
The narrative is awkward-"The two sat and stared out at the endless ocean, each with their own abilities of perception." What does that mean? That they each saw it? That they had unique special powers-and if so, what are these? Do you simply mean, "They sat sit by side, silently looking at the endless expanse of ocean"? Another point: typically, people who prefer tyranny do not refer to it as such (like your Skeldas character does), because they view it positively, while the mere word "tyranny" carries negative connotations. They can call it a democracy, a monarchy, a benevolent rule by a single autarch-whatever you wish; but not a tyranny. You need to let your characters speak as they would think, each within their own mindset, not interposing your own cultural lenses on their eyes. And I have to ask: what does any of this have to do with Ranma?
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