   Pete Zaitcev 12/31/04 . chapter 1I am really sorry to admit it, but this work is awfully difficult to read (@ch3 at present). It is too choppy, even if we discount author's interjections. But with those it is posititvely disjoint. Kaleidoscopic scene changes add to the effect. I have no idea how this can be improved and I suspect I simply miss the main idea completely. Maybe it was all by design.
The idea of bottled Jusenkyo water sounds very promising. Sleepingbear's Avatar uses a barrel of it, for instance. I'm surprised this is not used more often. |
| Twisted Mackeral 4/16/04 . chapter 2 Um. OK. Didn't Ranma and Shampoo just die? And now they're back alive again? Well that dont make a lick of sense. |
| opal eyes 10/18/02 . chapter 3 funny! |
| Bunnylord5 12/3/01 . chapter 1 Ha!hahahahaha! ohohoohmmmmm sorry. Ahahahaha! hehe. hem hohehehe haha! |
| Raven-Of-A-Took 7/5/01 . chapter 3 kewl story. keep writing! |
| Digiriven 6/13/01 . chapter 3 Okay fic |
| Atomic Chainsaw 3/4/01 . chapter 1 Hmm,spring of drowned girl and spring of drowned boy water could save transexuals a lot of money.. |
| Lady Omega 12/20/00 . chapter 1 HAHAHAHAHAH! |
| Vina 12/1/00 . chapter 1 Finally! CHINESE! |
| anon 7/18/00 . chapter 1 Otay... I was cool. Yeah I liked it except I kept getting lost a some point or the other. _ |
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