|Reviews for Visiting Time|
| Aries Zodiac 5/16/06 . chapter 1
You know, I like your writing. I like your style...mostly, I like your characterisation and I like your plotlines. But I really think you repeat yourself too much. The word 'smiled' is the one that really grates on me. I didn't mind it too much on the first one or four stories but it's not an isolated thing, it's every single fic. This one alone, I counted 29 uses of the word 'smiled' (and 5 'grinned'(s?).) Apart from this showing that I have no life, I think it kinda prves my point. Apart from this, I do like your stuff, most definately including this one.
| witchofnovember 1/17/05 . chapter 1
You knocked this one out of the park. Great job!