It’s different but I’m intrigued. So I hope you can update soon!
~SL05

Yup. It was better. Very, very funny as well, I liked it a lot. Good Job.
Again, the only way you make it better would be...
UPDATING! ;)
Jousting Elf with a Sabre
P.S. Love the Story.

It's really good! I've put this story on my favourites, and you on my author alert so I'll know when you post a new chapter. I'm glad you put the Elvish in itallics, though, as I only know a few words.

Well, this may or may not be a Mary-Sue, but I don't care. =) I like it!

I'm going to keep reading, it's good!

I will say this only once. Update.
I like this. Good Job.
Jousting Elf witha A Sabre
(The only way to make this better is to update)
:D

I used to be ranger-xion just to give you a remembrance of who I was.

Anyway, this is a mary-sue. But who cares? I don't. I find mary sues very hilarious somehow. And this story IS humor right? Well, this story is good, though I'm not a mary-sue fan, but I'll continue reading it anyway. And I haven't found any mistakes! So good for you for doing so well on your first story!

Post soon!

-Queen of Spadez

I was readin' your reviews for this story and noticed that many people were calling your main character a Mary-Sue. Yep, she sure is!
You should know by now that I love reading and writing Mary-Sue stories, lol. Why else would I have given Jack Sparrow a daughter in my PotC stories?
Yes, it is a Mary-Sue...but it's YOUR Mary-Sue! Feel proud! YAY!

Yea, I decided to check out your story, lol. Notice you haven't updated exactly recently...but oh well. I rather like this! LOVE the whole elvish-trickster thing, so cool!
Thanks for your reviews for "Kurt and the Shadowed Soul"! The sequel is up, by the way!
I hope you do continue this!

Sue.

I love it! It's so sweet. What a prank to play; and on Haldir, too! Update soon, it's great!

Mary Sue alert! Your English, and Elvish, for that matter aren't bad, but your character is a bit immature.

CC on Chapter One:' "How is it that an Elf, of all creatures, be such a nuisance?!"'

Obviously, *this* Gandalf has not been acquainted with the elves of Mirkwood. I know that in the Lord of the Rings, Tolkien made them seem a bit ethereal, but does not mean they are perfect. They still bear mischief, as you've shown in chapter two.

Nicknames are given for a reason. Gandalf calling Cirelondiel a swan probably should have some justification behind it.

Elf, hobbit/halfling, men, wizard, orc, and ent are nouns. Therefore they should only be capitalized when at the beginning of a sentace or being addressed personally. (ex: "You there, Elf!" Gimli shouted with indignance. As opposed to "Just because you're an elf does not give you reason to mock a dwarf!" Gimli stated.)

The FLASH FORWARD isn't necessary, and makes your story seem all the more juvenile. All you need to do is start it with "After hours of dancing.." and the reader will assume that time has passed.

I'm not going to say that elves never visit Hobbiton, but it is extremely rare for one to do so, and the reaction (or lack thereof) you have the hobbits making to the presence of the elf isn't accurate. Of course, your elf is already rare in that she has red hair and a maturity of a young teenager.

CC for Chapter Two: Elves don't have full names. They have a name, and perhaps an Common Speech compound word after it. (Elrond Halfelven, Legolas Greenleaf, ect.)

Again, saying FLASHBACK lowers the level of your story. You could easily make say something along the lines of "I remember the day so distictly..." Writing "flashback" makes it seem like you doubt the intelligence of your readers, and that we will only understand she is remembering something if you, the author, spell it out to us in all caps.

The way Cirelondiel has her heart broken sounds like a late night of "truth or dare- slumber party style!1!" Very un-elven, and I'm sure you can do better than that.

Please take the above into consideration.

May you never suffer writer's block.

-Irael

BTW, Mary-Sues tend to be enjoyable. Who cares if the story is a lil mary-sue-ish if it's still good. You can be creative and a good writer even if your character ends up falling under that title.

Aww, so cute. This is going very well. Nice start. Keep going and I'll continue reviewing.

Yep. Definetly a Mary-Sue. And it's a little too quick for my liking.

She's a Mary-Sue. Just warning you now.