| Reviews for Clearing Skies |
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Mir 1/27/08 . chapter 8Nice-I was glad to discover that you'd picked this story up again. I'd forgotten how much I'd enjoyed reading the earlier chapters. In this one, I particularly like how-despite all the ways he's grown-Yahiko still somehow seems young, unsure, awkward next to Sano. Both have matured of course, but some things never seem to change. |
Adelaide MacGregor 1/27/08 . chapter 8Another good job, good luck! |
TrisakAminawn 1/27/08 . chapter 8Heh, it's been going for more than three years...and boy, have you improved. Huzzah! Not that you weren't decent to begin with, of course. Kenji's Kenshin impersonation was pretty good, and you use Sano well. Heh, yes, Yahiko may have been a pick-pocket, but first he was the son of a samurai, and he's been civilized for some time. He always had an intense personality, but now that he's grown up his differences from sano are showing nicely. Good job. I thought he was supposed to have a son named Shinya, but Yuusuke is a great name. Oh, yes, I also liked the way Kaoru expelled Kenji. She's always been at her best with her students. Ta! Great chapters, since I haven't been by in a while. |
Scarred Sword Heart 1/27/08 . chapter 8I take it Kenji won't get to prove his mettle as a swordsman in this story? |
Lifestyle 1/27/08 . chapter 8Wow. Once again I'm yearning for more! Loved the quick update! |
skenshingumi 1/27/08 . chapter 8Wow, two updates in one month-that's great. Poor Kenji is just starting to realize that these guys really are bad guys. I thought the way he assumed it would make sense for the kidnappers to let him go was once again a sign of how sheltered Kenji's world view really is. As for Sano and Yahiko, it really is nice to see them work together. I had to snigger a little bit at how stiff and proper Yahiko of all people was being in the gambling den. It looks like he forgot his roots. I also like how you had Yahiko be sensitve to what Kenji would return to if word got out. He knows how important the dojo life is to Kenji. |
Lucathia Rykatu 1/26/08 . chapter 8Aw, Kenji played along after all! He sure imitated his father well. So strange to think of Yahiko as having a better upbringing. It hit so much harder that this is years after and that he's really grown up now! |
J Luc Pitard 1/26/08 . chapter 8I liked this chapter. The worry grows for our captives, but there's hope. One thing I found odd is that Yahiko would be unused to sitting around a gambling den. He wasn't that young when he was taken from one, after all. True, he'd been away from it, but I think you played him too middle income in that scene. Sano would be more at ease, but Yahiko, despite his finer clothes, should be able to go along with it better. The only other thing to point out is the use of the word 'finally' which becomes repetitive in the last few paragraphs (4 times in quick succession). It works to cut the last three out. Sano's reaction to the apology was lovely. |
lionheart555 1/26/08 . chapter 7Very nice story. I love the frequent switch between past and present to slowly develop Kenji's character and the plot. |
IVIaedhros 1/26/08 . chapter 8Only two or three chapters you say? I'm wondering how you plan to wrap it up and still satisfy all the figurative worms from the can you've opened. Fun chapter; enjoyed reading it. |
Little Minamino 1/19/08 . chapter 7This is very interesting. I really like the way that you've portrayed Kenji's personality. It reminds me a lot of my brother back when he was fifteen. He never really understood the effect his actions had on people either so I can really relate to Yahiko's feelings in this as well. Anyway, keep up the good work and I can't wait to read more. |
Zoleth 1/15/08 . chapter 7Ah - 8 months is nothing. Thanks for the update, it was a great read. |
IVIaedhros 1/12/08 . chapter 6Great fic'...though we've wandered pretty far off of old Sano. |
just another fma fan 1/12/08 . chapter 7 I love this story so far! I hate telling people to update soon because I know from personal experience what writer's block and exams and homework can do to your stories. I haven't written anything for myself in six months. So I completely understand how long one chapter can take you. But, I would like to say that your writing ability is impressive and I can't wait for the next chapter, so write as much as you can, as fast as you can, and I will wait as patiently as possible for you next update. Along with all your other fans. ) PS. this is an annoyymous review because I don't have an account, not because I don't want you to know who I am. xP |
Stella 1/11/08 . chapter 7 So. I was getting to the end of the chapter thinking, "NO! Don't end it! DON'T END IT! NO! NO!" please update? soon? please? pretty please? (collapses in desperation) please? Again - I love this story. Everybody loves this story. Keep up the great work. |