Reviews for Two Steps Forward

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Anon 2008-06-21 ch 1, anon.	abuseGreat writing! Thanks for updating.
Bud 2008-05-17 ch 15, anon.	abuseOne of my favourite stories - finally updated! Thank you for not abandoning it! It's actually a brilliant update, and I loved reading every line, so spot on, so perfectly balanced - I really hope the next chapter is coming soon!
Hilary Weston 2008-05-10 ch 15,	abuseYay! More story! What can I say, but brilliant as usual.
Lady Tragic 2007-06-01 ch 12,	abuseHey, just got through reading all your stories, and I must say, I like. Some of them could use a little editing TLC however- the ones that jump out are "Moments of Infinite Clarity", which is very good but needs someone to read through it and correct spelling and other such trivalities, and this one- Great, but at the beginning I was very confused by the jumping around in the timeline (a little year-date at the start of every chapter, just to know where we are, would have gone a long way.) Also, it needs to be finished, though I can see it's been a while. ^.^ Enough of the C/C, they're all very good (personally, I rather like "Mother"- That woman will be the death of him, indeed.) And as with everyone else I read, you have my unconditional and enthusiastic commendations for even having the courage to post your work in a public forum- you'll notice my profile remains empty. -Tragic (Ain't I just?)
Miranda Witherspoon 2006-10-26 ch 12, anon.	abuseI would just like to say, this is probably the BEST fanfiction I have ever read. I cannot wait for more! Seriously, I was on edge, I loved every word, and more the once did I have a tear in my eye. "Great work" doesn't seem to cover it.
C. A. LeSabre 2006-09-18 ch 12,	abuseI can't wait to read more of this story! You're doing an incredible job. So many wonderful details (I love the part about Ivanova's earring, for instance)...so very realistic (I'm really impressed with your total command of sensory details--all the little things that go to make the world real, like that description of Marcus getting his hair cut). It all feels much more real to me than JMS's alternative. You've got me on the edge of my seat! :)
Celebwen Telcontar 2006-07-03 ch 12,	abuseOh my... Andra's a bit paranoid! Of course being an artificial personality (A much better one that Garibaldi wound up with on one episode--he shot the computer), she has the right to go by her programming. Please continue, I can't wait for the next chapter! And at last we see Susan and Marcus getting together!
Celebwen Telcontar 2006-07-02 ch 11,	abuseVery well done!
Natters 2006-05-26 ch 12,	abuse"I'll take the ship, nice of you to offer." She chided him. lol. andra is so cool. more please
HIKARi 2006-05-23 ch 12, anon.	abuseupdates, updates, everyone loves the updates! ~HIKARi
K. C. Hulsman 2006-05-22 ch 12,	abuseI've been waiting for this next installment for a long time, and was delighted to see this latest chapter. Loved the bit about Susan asking who she was, and the revealing of that aspect of Marcus's tale to her. Oh just a suggestion, you might want to consider adding a separator, something like: + + + + + + + between them undressing each other, and then waking up the next morning. That transition is currently rather jarring and distracting from what you had established. I look forward to more!
La Llorona 2006-05-22 ch 12,	abuseYahoo - let's hear it for Marcus! :) I love all of your stories, this one no less than the others. I want to see how it works out with Susan being granted asylum and if she gets tracked down by the psi corps. I bet you write a really evil Bester :)
Indygodusk 2006-05-20 ch 12,	abuseYay for an update! There were some grammar/sentence errors in the last 20% of the chapter. Also, I was surprised by Susan's reaction to the speaking ship. I guess it could be because she's smart and immediately realized that the voice was special because it came from a living ship, but I kept remembering the episode when Garibaldi reactivated the annoying male AI voice on B5. I was surprised she didn't just think it was an AI at first. I loved the kissing and how Marcus woke up. I found Ivonova's actions during the kissing and afterward very in-character. Her noticing the virgin thing also amused me. I look forward to seeing Marcus defuse this next situation. I also wonder if Delenn will suspect. Thank you so much for this chapter!!
Shorty51 2006-05-20 ch 12,	abuseHaha! love the ship! And can we say FINALLY! LMAO
Indygodusk 2006-04-18 ch 11,	abuseI'm not used to seeing this side of Marcus, but it makes a lot of sense. I really like this story. I enjoy how you portray everyone's emotions. Your description of the forest scene and Ivonova's reaction to the newscast was also really good. I liked how Marcus took charge after the ISN broadcast. Thanks for this, and I really do look forward to the next chapter!

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