This is, up to this point, an excellent story, as all of your stories that I've read are. I do hope you continue it. After all, Kuno must be brought to justice and I really want to see what happens with Ranko as well

I don't suppose there's any progress on this in the last... oh.. 5 years or so? it's been a good read in any case

I saw part of this story on another site and I've been looking for it ever since! This is a great story. PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

Great fic so far. I never really did like Kuno at all, I have one fic that sort of redeems him but I feel dirty for doing it. Anyway, I really like this story and I hope you continue it.

very good story.. wish you'd finish it tho...

Very good writing.

This is not a bad story, but it can still need improvement.

You’re a good writer, but this story was a bit difficult to follow at some points. The flashbacks need to be more distinct, I kept confusing them with what was actually going on. Also, you need to focus less on the dialogue and more on the rest.

Your weakness is not your technique. Like so many other Ranma writers, you tend to exaggerate the characters. In particular, I think Kuno got the short end of the stick here. He’s stupid and eccentric, not insane. Anyway, he’d never attack a girl he likes, at least not without holding back immensely.

(Interestingly, though, you seem to have made him a bit too strong rather then the other way around. Ryoga handily beats Mousse like a drum, so I don’t think he’d have any real trouble with Kuno.)

Also, I really wish people would lay off the “Nabiki owns Nerima” cliché. She’s sneaky, but she’s not Hiruma Youichi or anything. (In this story it sort of works, though.)

I rather liked the Jigoku Hi Hono’o, even though it sort of came out of the blue. I know coming up with special techniques isn’t as easy as it seems, so you shall have kudos for that.

Never use multiple exclamation marks. It’s the mark of an amateur, and you’re definitely better then that.

You seem to be taking your time with the actual Nabiki/Shampoo, which is good. Too many writers rush into these things instead of letting it develop gradually.

took ages to read!

very good, im waiting for the next chapter.

I was reading the whole thing at work always switching back and forth between work and your story..I simply couldn't stop...

You're quite good :)

As for the draft: There are a few confusing points...

you still didnt correct the sensai - sensei thing

there are a few parts in your story I didnt understand what you meant (read it through again..you'll find it quickly)

Oh yea..you should add indetion whenever the scene changes..sometimes I had trouble figuring out who says what and where...that endangers the story flow which is quite good and one of the most important things!

Good story.

Please continue it.

very interesting story, though the Japanese term for teacher is sensei not sensai. Please update!

Another excellent chapter. I know you haven't updated this story in ages, but if there is anything other than the next chapter, could you send it to me at either:
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I ask because this has been one of the greatest ranma 1/2 fics I've read ever, and I'd like to see if there is anything more in it.

Once again a very good chapter, I think you conveyed Kasumi's attitude very well, over all excellent job.

Another good chapter, funny in parts, emotional in others. 10/10

Another great chapter, I liked the twist with the water, keep up the good work

Another brilliant chapter, so Nabiki also got some of the water? This is bad, very bad.