amazing... -^_^- i always thought amiboshi and yui are better together than yui-suboshi. i just don't like suboshi for her! i think amiboshi balances yui's personality. anyway, i so love this fic. hope you write more yui-amiboshi fics in the future! -^_^-

Wow... just... wow. Incredible. Thank you so much for posting this.

Wahh! I can't even begin to describe how wonderful you are and how wonderful this story is. The Seiryuu characters were interesting and complex and undeniably ** up which is why they're my favourites.

Then you write this story and just wow. I'm totally floored. This is a beautiful story. Definitely bittersweet but at least Yui has a happy ending that I've always thought most befitting. It bothers me that while yes, Seiryuu was a bad guy, it doesn't stop them from being utterly complex and human and it isn't right that they can't their peace while the others get theirs.

>.> XD Lovely. You totally own the Fushigi Yuugi fandom.

Your work is gorgeous, as always. I checked out the last chapter on your website-- and bravo! I love your spin on the Seiryuu seishi. If only, hmm? :) Anyways, lovely story.

Hey what in the whole world happened at the end of the chapter??

Wow! Amazing chapter. Although im a little confused. but i think im supposed to be? Right? idk...but im confused lol. noentheless it was good...im just lost on what really happened or is happening or...is in the shell...or something? idk obviously. lol

I'm so anxious for the next chapter its not even funny lol. It's getting suspensful! ACK! I can't take it! lol. Well i'm sorry it took me so long to read and review this...i was so busy...geesh. Well sorry again! Awaiting your next update! ^.^

~miracle

Hey lookie another chapter! YAY! ^.^ This one was pretty cool. I liked how Tomo was in it a lot more this time. You make him such a likeable character compared to the book. I like him a lot more in this story. Good job and keep up the hard work! Waiting anxiously for your next chapter...so update soon! >please< lol. ^.^

i absolutely adore your story. It's so well written. I have to say you have a style completely your own. And I'm sorry i didnt review every chapter...i got really busy. But this chapter was good and i can't wait for the next one! Please UPDATE SOON!!

Incredible. Out of all the Yui fics I've read, this is by far the best. I'll be back again when the next chapter is up, leep up the good work!

Oh my god...that...that was truly amazing. I can't really put it in any other words...

very interesting..update okay?

I like the premises for this fiction. I know I didn't spell that word right...oh well. I like Soi and I can see her trying to make penance for her decisions. Amiboshi was my favorite Seiryu seisha...he deserved to be Suzaku though. Poor guy. Anyways, good job so far!

Please update soon^^

Well...stupid thing won't let me sign in...

Whew, I finally finished it all... @.@ Came out to almost 80 Word document pages. But, hey, it was worth all the paper and risking an explosion from my computer lab teacher. XD

Well...to start off, very, very few problems. I suggest profreading your work occasionally though, mainly before you post the next chapter, and to refine your exisiting ones to prefection. There are some errors and a couple of grammar problems (though negelctible they are: missing commas, spelling errors, etc.), and at the level you are at, it's neccesary that you keep your work as smooth as possible. You'll get more envious people that way. ~_^ (and perhaps rival Rose Thorne's work XD)

You've done a nice job to keep the attention of the reader, so I have no comments on that. *but*, the first chapter is a bit on the tedious side-there are some places that could use less description so the chapter can move faster. I don't think it would be much of a problem to take some pieces out. This is mainly the beginning, before Yui gets out of the dungeon for good. The rest of the story works just fine. That still shouldn't keep you from re-reading your work every so often; it'll help you catch places that you think may use a bit of editing and/or revision. I do it all the time, so my work 'evolves' every once in while... XD

Now, I'm going to go into metaphors...a great usage with them. However, I'd just like to point out that you'd sometimes have to be careful with them...

"Kaika was comfortable like the mountains of the country he calle dhome, constant like the sun, and gentle like the wind."

Now, think about the wind a bit more deeply. Is the wind always gentle? Let's not forget how annoying and cold they can be in the winter, and how firece they are in hurricanes and storms. You want to pick a metaphor that makes absolute sense (I have no better way to explain it...), always centered around the same thing. Bear with me, here...I'm trying to make sense. ^^; The best I can do is show an example...

Say you're describing a woman who has blue, cold eyes. To be creative, what would be most fitting to show how unpleasent this lady could be? (heh.)

"Her eyes as blue as blue knives."

This is what I mean: this is a poor description, because not all knives are blue, and specifying only the subsection of knives that are blue completely ruins the effect.
I must make another point:

"Her eyes are as blue as smurfs with daggers."

NEVER go into this. Especially in a serious story. Sorry...I had to do that, lol.

"Her eyes are like the crack and tumble of blue, glacial ice."

THIS is what I mean. Glacier ice is always blue and always sharp, especially in a situation like this. Once I again, I hope I made sense. XD

Yeh...I can't wait for the next chapter. ^.^ I was enthralled by it enough that I forgot I was baking in the sun outside. XDD Good thing I didn't get sunburned (in alaska... o.0).

(whew...if you wondering, I've written reviews longer than this.)

The rest of you reviewers, give her (or him?) more support! There's more to fanfiction than yaoi and yuri. XP