So I know RL can really interfere with fic writing but I hope you keep this up. You made me really want to see how things end in Tethyr. Anywho, well written and please don't leave your devoted readers hanging :)

Amanda

It's been a joy to read your fic, Kendris! I deeply admire anyone who can write an Anomen who is hot and sexy, instead of the whiny git I disliked in the game! In fact, reading your story has made me want to break out my BG2 and ToB discs and play all over again, which is the highest compliment I can pay to you. I also admire your determination to continue to write this fic for three years, and I hope you'll update again.

I myself have written a fic (in a different game universe) for five years, and I've also succumbed to WoW as well, and I can well understand how RL and the siren call of other games can interrupt the writing.

I think you capture the 'voices' of the characters from the game very well, doing a great job showing the relationships of adventurers who have been traveling together for so many years, and the new members of the party who join up. You do an exceptional job of showing their interactions, their feelings for each other, their hopes and dreams in dialogue, gestures and their banter. You show and don't tell.

I've caught some mispellings and letter juxtapositions still, and some missing commas and periods, but other than that, it's quite good.

naw, i kind of agree with the below comment. HOWEVER, please dont stop writing it! i think your story is really well done and well written. i love how you've managed to keep most of the characters in character the whole time, yet showed different sides of their personalities at the same time.
dont be discouraged! your story is made of awesomesauce =D
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This is one of the best BG2 fics around, almost in the league of 'A Cappella' and 'Tankards and Tempers'.

I think you made a mistake going off into the original plot at this point in the story, however. You're dealing with the Realms in a very realistic style, with hunger and thirst and economics, and yet you've left Suldanessellar to its own devices for what will probably be a very long time. It's sealed off from the outside world, occupied by a rampaging horde of drow and rakshasa, and Irenicus can carry out his assault on the Life Tree completely undisturbed. By the time Jess gets back to her mission most of the elves will be dead, the few survivors will have had to resort to cannibalism, and Irenicus will either be the newest member of the Seldarine or will have had his head kicked in by Corellon Larethian, Rillifane Rallathil, and company.

You've made the decision now, and you're going to have to stick with it, but it would have been much better if you'd left the Tethyr thing until after liberating Suldanessellar and killing Irenicus.

wow! your story is amazing! i found it like 4 days ago and have been addicted ever since, no thanks to college and work
:( if you ever think about making this into a movie i'm your main character :) strange as it sounds it's almost like you main character is me! My name is jess so is hers i hav green eyes so does she! she's tall so am i! she feels alone so do i! only difference is i'm blonde! Anyways i love the whole story and can't wait till the next chapter! Keep Writing!!

Oh, Vicky :( At first I thought they'd come for Sola (doesn't he have some fights in his mod); I didn't know this happened to Vic :( will this mean she has to learn some grudging respect and tolerence for her companions?! :)

Jaheira and Boo -- too cute! And almost as cute, but not quite, was Aerie and Minsc cuddling together in their clothing. Aw :)

A good chapter, and a good battle -- I know how demanding RL can be, but I'll wait for the next chapter as patiently as I can!

I was really glad to see this up and to hear that you were still alive ;)

Of course I am looking forward to Jessime and Imoen being reunited with the rest of their party, but this chapter was a nice little "interlude". So Shar has forsaken Viconia... no chance of Viconia turning to Eilistraee, is there? lol Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing how you'll develop this and the rest too, of course.

Keep writing!

Yay, another chapter! So is it because Shar forsook Viconia that the handmaidens were able to find her? That sounds like a much better explanation than them randomly showing up just because you were romancing her in the game. Thanks for bringing me back from the depths of withdrawal...I hope we'll see more chapters soon, or a continuation of Two Souls (though no hate if it takes awhile, of course :D).

Greetings,

Started reading this story way back when. Then along came RL and numerous other distractions. But I am most happy to say that I have now caught up with your story and its latest chapter, and may I say, brava!

Your characterizations are as true as ever, and most enjoyable.
I have also really enjoyed the addition of the Shadowmaster. I always did think he was underdeveloped . . . cough, let me rephrase, his character's potential was never fully tapped.

Anyhow, I look forward to more, RL not withstanding,
Thanks for your hardwork,

Tylenol Faire

Hey hey... another chapter! And to my surprise(not really), just as good as always. Real life takes time, and we understand that, so no worries there! Good characterization of everyone, (which I admit I'm envious of how easily it seems to flow for you in that regard.)

I think you've captured Solaufein's character in a marvelous way, and his interaction with Jaheira seems appropriate... not sure why, but they seem well suited to relate.

I am looking forward to seeing just what Imoen and Jess have been doing this whole time.

Once again, a refreshing read. A fine job!

Solaufein strikes again! I guess I need to read some Wordsworth, just so I can keep up with this guy, of course. ;) You may hate writing bridge chapters Kendris, and for what it's worth I agree with you entirely, but you make it look easy. No complaints, as usual. :)

-Reklar

Nicely crafted, Kendris. I am always impressed by your adept handling of Viconia and I very much appreciate her deference towards Khalid. I'm not sure how difficult it was for you to put this chapter together, but you most certainly made it flow so easily that one would think you breezed right through it. I can't say I've ever thought of Minsc and Aerie developing the kind of relationship that is being alluded to by Jess and Viconia, but I'll just read on to see how you handle it before commenting. ;)

-Reklar

You just can't go wrong with Robert Frost, though I admit I have most likely not read that poem yet (hard to tell what I remember anymore). I knew I sensed something developing between Imoen and Solaufein, but even without that I certainly like his outsider perspective casting light on the shadow that is Imoen's self-doubt. Speaking from personal experience, an outside perspective is often the catalyst towards recognizing what you've been told for years by those whom you know and trust. I look forward to seeing how Imoen adapts to Solaufein's council. :)

-Reklar

Nice save with the use of the Slayer, but it would have been more fun if Jess had thrown Anomen to safety. :D

I don't have any complaints, though I wonder about using the Slayer in this situation, but I can see where you're going with it (I think), so I'll just file it away for future review. :)

-Reklar

Wow, I've never really had much affection for elves as a race, but Elhan takes the freaking cake here for being insufferably rude and arrogant. Jess took the high road here, but I'm not so sure I wouldn't have spit at his feet after that sort of treatment. Very well done as always, Kendris. ;)

-Reklar