 Spinereader 2005-01-28 . chapter 1That's beautiful! That such a sweet memory Sesshoumaru has of his brother.
Good though this story was, you might want to consider revising it. You had a couple of word mix ups here and there (like 'were' instead of 'was', 'resent' instead of 'recent') and you put all the dialogue into one paragraph, which made it a bit hard to read. If you end up deciding to fix this up and want a beta reader to help, feel free to ask me. If not, that's perfectly fine. It's still a very good story. |