honestly, this is pretty good. Its weird in a good way. Squall in the house of female horrors and Keitaro in the school of hard knocks for magic...you can't get any better than this...actually you can but i'd rather not go into details that'll hurt your head.

I've gotta say that OCs when written right add flavor to the story. Most people are biased about them because they'd like to see more of their favorite characters doing who knows what in their imagination. On the other hand, an OC is like a trademark from the author to the audience so if the OC is given proper due, they actually create seamlessness in a story.

Honestly, the only reason your audience is split is because you've got the Hinata Sou mad house fans and the 'FFVI sucks because it didn't do as well as FFVII but I played it for the heck of it' fans. Both are die hards with one just plain random and the other completely in focus. You've got a lot on your shoulders with this story. But it'd be great if you could pull it off even further than 6 chapters.

About the Squall and Motoko idea, i just have to go 0_0
It's a match made in Soul Calibur...correction, Soul Blade because their weapons can break. How the hell did his gunblade made of material strong enough to tear apart bosses easily break to Motoko's chi attacks? What is she, the long lost cousin of Setsuna Sakurazaki?

And another thing to rant about is that Squall is using magic right in front of them. Now that will lead to a lot of explaining to do. its like telling a blind person what a rainbow looks like on a sunny day. All the bishounen needs are round glasses, a griffindor robe and a wand cause he's got the scar to complete the look...well almost.

at least TRY to update this story. It's got fantastic potential. Especially considering that Keitaro's strongest stat is luck meaning he can find all the rare items with ease and evade blows much more easily. Add that to his already quick reflexes and high endurance and you've got a thief in the making...or at least an agile warrior.

But what worries me though is that Squall might mature to a different direction without the Rinoa around. (There's always one girl like her and their a life saver.) I mean Squall of the last disc is different from the Squall of the first disc. The only way that Motoko would actually fall for the guy is if he was Squall of the last disc.

Anyway, I hope you update soon. ^_^

awesome!! man its been a while since you updated your fic. i hope you,re not dead otherwise it'd be a damn shame not to see an end to this fic.( this one of the first i read in the old days and i still have hope to see its ending one day ; )

anyway i hope you'll be back soon. one of your faithfull fans talantus.

I think manager is written as kanririn and Keitaro's last name is Urashima, not Urishima.

cool

another fight scene man? I like fight scenes as much as the next guy but we need some lovey duvvy stuff in here too. It wouldn't be a love hina fic without it.

ho nice! finally somethign i'm able to read, ( the others were just too boring to read) i liek the inner voive being brought out... btu aren't them supposed to dissapear when he is not hungry? ( maybe he didn't eat for days hahaha.

by the way, keitaro's familly name is not urishima but urAshima. instead of that, i saw some others errors but nothing dramatic.

overall, i'd give you story a good 9/10 for now.( it may change on how the story is develloping)
this is definitively on my watch list!

not bad man. it great to see your new chap. cant wait for the next. thank you for writing. lol ^_^

Ugh, malboros are without a doubt in my opinion, the most annoying monster in the game... Well enough about that, I'm glad to see another chapter, I can't wait to see how the fight turns out. Update soon!

Glad to see that you're still alive. +)
Your OCs aren't too bad actually; they just look like ordinary seeD students (I hope thats what you were going for). -_-;
Your story is coming along nicely.

Know how you feel... the longest time I've ever had yet to update was about 5 months and 6 days... Anyways, great chapter! Let's see how the developments are going right?

This is Final Genesis, signing out!

pretty cool, i am excited to see what the immortal Keitaro will do next

lol nice. sry i havent reviewed in a while. lol i forgot to check for a while. and no sledge hammers requiered. just throw it lol. cant wait for the next chapter. thank you for writing.

This is a very well done story (Though I haven't played FF8 in a while) *Sheepish grin*

Waiting for chapter 6 (Keitaro's Combat Training...
Wonder how he'll fair against Seifer)

Also; very nice how Squall used Doomtrain. THink you can throw in some other summons?

Interesting crossover, something I don't often see. Hopefully both Squall and Keitaro will be able to survive different worlds!

This is Final Genesis, signing out!

Another good chapter! Squall's being put through alot, just don't hurt my Kei-Kun!