Interesting start of a story! I've always wondered wheter there was something before birth, wheter we existed like you described in this chapter.

Nice! Keep Going!

I really like this; it's very descriptive and you developed the dialogue in that opening scene of Koh's birth really well. Not that it's bad to copy a script word for word, but it really adds something to the story if you don't. Anyway, it's really good and I can't wait for more! I usually make it a rule to add some criticism in my reviews, just to help the writer, but I honestly can't think of anything. Yay for you! _

awsome start, there is very good foundatin here, i think

Write more!NOW!

Keep up the god work :D

This is a really interesting take on the Tower. I like how you think! ;) Anyway, I'll be waiting for the next chapter...