I didn't know they had Azure dreams stories here. I liked what you did, even if it's destined to be incomplete.
bye.

It's pretty good, but are you ever going to update? I saw your old story; are you going to let this one die too?

A good begining, would like to see more. The monsters for the game where great.

It's a good story. Written very descriptively and I like how you continue the grudge with Ghosh onto Weedy. This story has potential, and you already presented an interesting question at the start: What happened to Koh? I think a few good chapters would entail what had happened to the girls after Koh's disappearance. Just a suggustion. Also, thank you for your critique on my story.