each of your stories just make me want to bawl. i really, really love this.

Wow, this is great. Short, but so powerful. I hope you write more than just fanfic! (P.S.- did you know you don't accept anonymous reviews?)

Good story. So sad, and yet just how I can imagine Luke feeling about it all. It's also great to read non-spoilery fics! You showed a lot of hurt in not very many words in this one. Thanks for sharing it!

Hey,

This was a very intriguing and beautiful piece of fiction.

Bye, smile :-)

Loved it!

Oh wow, this is really good. Even though I don't like that they are going to split up I still believe it will lead to something better. I hope this story doesn't end with this chapter only and you decide to continue it ;)

Aww...I love luke, and lorelai lying to him wanted to make me throttle her. she is not treating him right, and I hate that. he needs someone better, I never thought i would say that, because I love Luke and Lorelai but if she continues to treat him that way, I think he was better off alone without hurricane Lorelai.
LP

Loved your story.

Very well written! The echoing words so right with this 'less is more' style of writing. Something I always try to do but fail at. As far as the characterization; You are right in a way. Luke has never been a forgiving man. Never willing to meet in the middle to work things out (probably why he's been alone so much of his life) The world to Luke, certainly as you paint it, is very black and white. Not a lot of room for mistakes from others. It will be interesting to see if ASP goes this way too. I'd like to hope that L&L are growing. She more willing to integrate her two lives and face up to things, he more willing to be less judmental and angry. We'll see. It seems as though ASP only thinks these two are interesting if she breaks them up time and time again. First the summer separation, so they had to have a gresh start in the fall, and now this. I wonder too if Lorelai's lie bothers him more (as you posit) than her family's disapproval? Well, this is way too long, I apologise! Very interesting take. I always enjoy when someone is actually able to find a fresh way of looking at things. Well done and thank you for taking the time to write and post!

I really like the kinda abrupt style of this story, illustrating Luke's thoughts. My favorite line was "And he couldn't fish without a pole." It was funny, in a sad way. It was great how Lorelai's lie, Luke's preparation for leaving, and Luke being alone at the cabin were all intertwined. It wasn't like beginning, middle, end, which was awesome. This does leave the reader wondering about the details of what had happened, although including them would probably spoil the tone, so I'm torn. Are you going to continue this? I thought this would serve quite well as a prologue to a bigger story about Luke and Lorelai, but it's also a very good one-shot. Great work!

aww that so soo sad very well written though!!

:( This is so sad! And so believable! Can you update and make a chapter with Lorelai's POV? and maybe...a make-up? You're a really good writer. Continue the good work!

I liked this little vignette. I like how you make it so we can feel Luke's pain but you don't make him weepy, which is something I could NEVER picture Luke doing.